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garage band glories |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Tell me didja lose it too? Are you too white to keep a beat? Did you lose it on the strings sliding with a long neck cheat? Did you pause to hit a shot and miss the simple grasp of things? Did you really buy the 'tude'? (and please? who toldja you could sing?) Did you think you could distort past progression of the chord? And the whammy bar was jammed but oh I loved the way the cord wrapped between yer knees... priceless yes it was indeed-- the way you hunkered down... Yep. I know. You don't know her. Not that one in front of you. Lifting up her skirt on cue begging for a thrust-she dared-- to turn around in flicking tongue as if you were the only one It made me wonder how... how she knew the things to do she looked like she was home she donned a toga just for us knowing that she was in Rome-- princess pouting cinnamon kiss her she's brown-sugar lipped-- there's a flask in cleft between begging for a sip BOOM pah BOOM and spin the sticks clash of cymbals and lipstick powder flash and life that licks and leaves me with a taste... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K - *smiling at you* the way you progress from him to her within a melody . . . is quite amazing Lady Did you think you could distort past progression of the chord? And the whammy bar was jammed but oh I loved the way the cord wrapped between yer knees... priceless yes it was indeed-- the way you hunkered down... liking the sound of this *smile* xxoo |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen?...just...wow So much to hear and feel in this one... I don't have the words...but this hit me. Hugs you...love you, lady...  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Didn't we agree that drummers are bad for your health????? Nice poem!  |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Love it! You hooked me into the reading with the title...and then when I saw the words I had to smile. It's been such a long time since I visited my old garage band days...but the words with which you painted brought the moment all back. You captured the very essence of those days of yesteryear for me. Thanks Serenity that's a very special gift. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yep! witch? Ya gotta way with words lady! And? Just a way... ~yeti "In looking Northward, I see a light" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Luscious? keep em comin, pleaseee don't stop. Keeping this... M  fate is not just |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ah yeah, brings back many a memory of rehearsal with the guys!!!! Love the way you put the pics back into my head...rock on, girl...~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Awesome K, oh and uh scuse me ice but not all guys who play the drums are bad..well, okay.. we are but shhhhhhh |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
I was in this band! lol back in the late 80's Jason |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity Sometimes ya just have to go with the flow...your poem felt this way, ya know? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Grin...thanks all. This was inspired by a neighbor's sound room--that same one that is located 15 feet away from my room.  They had a little jam session yesterday. (Why does EVERYBODY feel the need to play "Smoke On The Water" anyway? sigh.)I swear that stuff just seems to follow me around...Thanks for reading. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Since I can not carry a tune, nor play any instrument known to man... I was, sadly, always the groupie and never a group... But I loved this! (again, the groupie!) Susan |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I had a crush on a drummer once....till he dropped his stick and lost his beat. Love this Karen. Chris |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Part of Mardi Gra (sp?) pervades the soul of your writes...the jazz that always plays to me in the background...the flavor of the colorful folk you paint so well. Really great. TD |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
WOW!!WOW!!WOW!!!You go girl.This speaks so much and I loved it. Crystal |
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