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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-09-08 08:26 PM

september's a bridge
on the journey to fall,

of vacancies at windows
where songbirds would call,

of autumn's crayolas,
wine and amber tinged leaves,

before they will wither
to the frost that fall weaves,

the shawl of the sunlight,
warms the now cooler breeze,

sands beneath feet,
blissful shore, tourist free,

september's sweet sonnet,
twilight's hush before dark,

a reflection and a pause,
on the transition to stark

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (09-10-2003 04:48 PM).]

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-09-08 08:34 PM

Michele..you have penned this one perfectly.
Your timing on the changing seasons couldn't be better.
Lovely imagery brought this one to life.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have sand in my shoes ~

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-09-08 08:43 PM

Michele, this is beautiful. I love the way you rhymed this one, too. I hope you are putting all your seasonal poems in a special place....I know that I am...if that's okay with you.

Hugs

Ethel

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

3 posted 2003-09-08 08:55 PM

Michele - you just get better and better...

BC

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-09-08 10:58 PM

the shawl of the sunlight,
warms the now cooler breeze,

loved these lines,,
very good penning lady poetess

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

5 posted 2003-09-09 12:41 PM

"of autumn's crayolas,
wine and amber tinged leaves,

before they will wither
to the frost that fall weaves,

the shawl of the sunlight,
warms the now cooler breeze"

Gah, amazing writing, once again. This is so calm and serene..

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

6 posted 2003-09-09 05:45 AM

Some really good lines. I like transitions, keeps things interesting and fresh. Well done

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2003-09-09 10:54 AM

Michele~

This was so beautiful and so detailed in so few words...

Susan

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

8 posted 2003-09-09 11:22 AM

I felt a certain serenity come over me while reading these words. Enjoyed!

James_A_Fraser
Senior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

9 posted 2003-09-10 11:34 AM

Yes, not stark yet. It will be, but still there's a little time, a last few days to get it all in, be ready for what comes.

A very sensitive piece of writing, with so many dimensions. Well done.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

10 posted 2003-09-10 03:47 PM

As I often find too many great lines to quote in your works, the feeling conveyed was priceless.
TD

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

11 posted 2003-09-10 04:37 PM

"september's a bridge
on the journey to fall,

of vacancies at windows
where songbirds would call,

of autumn's crayolas,
wine and amber tinged leaves,

before they will wither
to the frost that fall weaves,"

Michele...this is just beautiful, my friend.
I particularly love the reference to crayolas.
Wonderfully penned.
Hugs,
~Vicky
If you judge people, you have no time to love them.
--Mother Teresa

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

12 posted 2003-09-10 04:43 PM

Marvelous, Michelle! Simply marvelous! An exquisite poem of seasons in transition.

Linda

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

13 posted 2003-09-10 05:04 PM

Ahh...the warmth of summer, or the beauty of autumn...beautiful write, Put that picture back!

Jason

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

14 posted 2003-09-10 10:48 PM

Ohh Michele,
what beautiful style you have here
this is perfection and ahhh sound quite peaceful there on those Jersey shores

sands beneath feet,
blissful shore, tourist free,

september's sweet sonnet,
twilight's hush before dark,
xxoo

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

15 posted 2003-09-10 10:50 PM

I love the transtiont of this write.It soothes the soul.

Crystal

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