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James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2003-09-09 04:03 PM




I feel it, like a thread
of smoke, a shimmer of threat
on the horizon,
feel the wind pull, pull to me,
bring the smell of it,
a tiny bite underneath,
an imagined heat,
image of a distant pain.
It is heartbreak there,
just this side of the mountain;
and it’s moving this way fast.


James A. Fraser

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Endlessecho
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since 2003-09-05
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1 posted 2003-09-09 04:05 PM


Wow.  I'm scared.  seriously.  That poem left a chill down my spine.  maybe because it hits so close to home.  I'm moving away from the mountain!  Can you outrun heartache?  I doubt it. ;-)

Wonderful peice.  Really wonderfully written. thank you.

Bill Charles
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2 posted 2003-09-09 05:53 PM


James - I've known this heartbreak that mountains will not contain...

BC

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Canada eh.
3 posted 2003-09-09 06:44 PM


Excellent write Jamie.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

      ~ Summer can't be over...
   I still have sand in my shoes ~

Martie
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4 posted 2003-09-09 07:53 PM


Jamie

Sometimes very sensitive people can feel something like this coming.  I hope that all is well.  Emotive and meaningful writing for such a short poem.

hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 2003-09-09 07:53 PM


Excellent
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6 posted 2003-09-10 08:31 AM


There is a certain beauty in this write of impending doom... even as it gives chills that scurry unpleasantly along my backbone. *S* A long way of saying... this is superb!
littlewing
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7 posted 2003-09-10 08:35 AM


oooh James, reminded me of the calm before the storm
Beautiful writing, friend
xxoo

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