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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Searching Static by the windowpane Feeling transcendental strain Spirits pass the portal glass And hover over fields of grass Searching for a fantasy Beyond this mortal agony Caressing flowers that were cast Each moment of a bloom that past Touching looms of misty rhyme That past into the sands of time Seeing through the crystal due The essence of the magic you And in his heart and mind he cries The deepest of the deepest sighs And weeps a tear the visions sphere So very far and yet so near He would a single fatal goal You live forever in his soul. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That we are all immortalized in some one's very soul... even, forbid, there's dust to dust, still, 'tis a worthy goal... Good morning Sy!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Sy! Here you are this bright morn, with more wise words for us to devour. Wonderful read this ayem. Chai tea is just about ready.  ~Morning Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Thank you sweet a lovely answer.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nancy, My pleasure and I'll be right there. |
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Cerenity'sLine Junior Member
since 2003-08-26
Posts 21 |
Hi Sy, I just love the way you write, comforting this one feels. Love, Cerenity |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Searching for a fantasy Beyond this mortal agony" and.. "He would a single fatal goal You live forever in his soul." Oh those lines are soooo good! I loved this Sy! Susan |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
What a nice flow...with beautiful language! Eric |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Sy, the flow of this, made it seem as if we actually moving. Loved it. smoooooth! Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cerenity, Thank you dear I loved your coment. Susan, Thank you so much. Ericc Enjoyed your comment. gemjop Thank you for the smooooth. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Static by the windowpane Feeling transcendental strain Spirits pass the portal glass And hover over fields of grass =================== Touching looms of misty rhyme That past into the sands of time Seeing through the crystal due The essence of the magic you And in his heart and mind he cries The deepest of the deepest sighs And weeps a tear the visions sphere So very far and yet so near He would a single fatal goal You live forever in his soul. ================================ Good grief I love when you write like this... the intensity alone is enough to make me sigh and be high...then you add in these images, personifis and analogies and I am moth giddy...this was pure poetry in motion when read aloud..loving your word play and masterful cadence of rhyme as always.. and this verse....... Static by the windowpane Feeling transcendental strain Spirits pass the portal glass And hover over fields of grass that verse and all it conjures is cooler than a mere moth has words for... Static transcendental strain portal glass now tell me that dont rock and roll in the rain. LOL me thinks you are too cool for your own good! LOL   awesome write Sy-babes!!  When was the last time you felt this high, |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Seymour, I love so to read of your seaching for fantasies....and about the ones that you find. Thanks for sharing them with us. Hugs  Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mornin', T-Man! This is another fine example of "The essence of the magic you"!  EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Your comments on the poem was everything I wanted to hear. I've never had anyone read me so well. It's like describing the beauty of a flower. One within my power. You are no moth but a mix of butterfly and Angel. WWRS |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethel, Thank you my love you are a dear. Earth Angel And this from the essence of the Angel you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And in his heart and mind he cries The deepest of the deepest sighs And weeps a tear the visions sphere So very far and yet so near He would a single fatal goal You live forever in his soul. Ah, dear friend... you've touched this soul deeply with this... Excellent! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Than I am happy. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And in his heart and mind he cries The deepest of the deepest sighs And weeps a tear the visions sphere So very far and yet so near Perfect! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy I think you have written words that are in many a heart. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Thank you my friend, you do me honor. James, Thank you for the nice. Martie If so then I am happy. |
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