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Dying Alone
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Dying Alone |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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The track is impaired now. The onset of earlier sundowns deem it with night blindness ringed now my feet, in shadows, as sun has narrowed into towns of western timezones. This little one will have no choice this end of season of whether to fly to warmth or stay the snow; he has lied for days now at the base of the joggers trail, pulverized, smashed, without dignity, he died alone. Below the hand of God , he lays anonymous, even Potters Field does not embrace his soul.*** Nightly the news comes, heard between laundry cycles and dishes drying, as i go numb, becoming human once more, i run, along this track where death is marked. Poor little sparrow, a mothers child, stranded, does she even know? stranded like stars, without a hint of moon tonight, and me, circling the darkness on the jogger's trail, feeling it deeply, all alone. ****Potter's Field, on April 20, 1869. Louisa Van Slyke, an orphan who died alone in Charity Hospital at the age of 24, became the first to be buried there. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (09-06-2003 01:17 PM).] |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Very sad, we recently had a small child die from being lfet in the car (didn't personally know them), another child got shot by someone on drugs(knew them), and a friend at the age of 28 died of cancer.It's been an agonzing week around here and one that needs to be relighted.Am working on a write and this reminded me of it.  Crystal |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Emotionally stirring poem. Your poetry always touches me--and in so many ways. At times I soar high; other times I sink low. Then there are times when I laugh--then there are times that I grow. But one thing is constant--I am always affected by your writing.   Linda |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Michele - you do write with emotion... BC |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh My Michele, goodness how sad . . . when I was reading this, I instantly thought of a bird leaving the nest, you know? Off to school . . . *smile* Bless you for writing this xxoo |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
*sigh... |
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lotusblossom Junior Member
since 2003-09-04
Posts 10 |
inkedgoddess- This is a very emotional and touching write. Great writing. -lotusblossom |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You got right to the heart of the matter, and to me. This poem held me in its grip with wrenching emotions right to the very end. I love it when you write with such emotion. What a very sad tale this was, but extremely well done. I don't want to know where I am heading, it will spoil my journey. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michele, this really touched me. There was such a sadness in it. Hugs to you Ethel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very emotive write...grips you and doesn't let go till the end. Well done! ~Soft smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This one made me feel. It's very effectively done. Thank you. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Full of emotion....Powerful! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This reminded me of something.. Yesterday as I was opening the door a little baby lizard jumped on my hand. It scared me and I instinctively (I don't have spell check on this) flung my hand and it went flying...poor thing..I felt such guilt... I enjoyed this writing very much. Susan  Psst..Michele...are you a runner? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ohhhh God  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks angel......that is too sad, and unfortunately it has happened out here too this past summer e.angel..i am glad to touch like this bill...yes the emotional one,i am sue, yes...off to school, some for the first time, my little boy....his last busride this year on the bigbird yellow bus!! except he wants to drive there to school,when he gets his license come october....bbrrr, gives me chills thinking of him on the road kauro.....*sign....yes for the babybird too lotus, thanks for reading and welcome to pips thanks mysteria, yes it was sad, i couldn't look away anymore,.thans for stopping by ethel....yes, too sad and thanks for reading thanks nancy, for understanding this feeling thanks pilgrim, for the feedback bboy.......yes and not too long winded for you i hope.....lol, thanks susan...i know that feeling of smacking a bug or something by accident and feeling that sadness when you know you've hurt them if by accident...run, walk, jog, depending on the mood and weather dixie........yes, cry for his soul, thank you |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
May I keep this one, Michele? You've written this one straight from the heart and soul, and preserved the memory of another soul with great tenderness. Beautifully done, my friend. namaste |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
beatufiul and thoughtful write mish...where's the pic i really liked that one?! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Michele, it is just terrible how some are left behind as orphans and they simply can't make it on their own forever, dearest friend, my heart cries out to this victim and many others of this isolation! (sad sigh) Your heart beams with compassion, dearest friend, I pray for all the children of the world, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michele, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
inkedgoddess...So touching and tender are your words. A sad sad story. This shouldn't have to happen to anyone. Thank you for sharing this with us...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Have a hard time myself with the concept of facing such times alone. You did well in the convey of the emotions here...as always. I think that God must give special attention in these cases, there must be many angels to escort these souls to eternity. TD |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michele...written with compassion, touching to me. Thank you! |
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