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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-09-04 09:12 PM


I won't ever let go
of the smoke
I exhaled,
it slithers
from my lips
all too clear.
i
breathe out
again
and wonder
is
this smoke
just
a strain
of
loss..?
Closing my
eyes
to slip away..
where
will I be
in the next
one thousand
todays..

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
Kielo
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1 posted 2003-09-04 11:16 PM


When I can explain depths of the pain of loss, I will. Until then, I'll just keep reading you. You're amazing.

Kielo

I'll never forget you.... I know that much, despite my foolishness.

QjQ
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2 posted 2003-09-04 11:27 PM


nicely written and expressed deeply,,,,

nice pic,,

            


MERCURY
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3 posted 2003-09-05 04:57 AM


the smoke you exhale is not a strain of loss but it is the fire within you burning.Great stuffffffffff.


Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-09-05 09:27 AM


  "next one thousand days"

Loved that line.

Susan

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5 posted 2003-09-05 11:47 AM


Something beautiful lies here.
angelblueyes
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6 posted 2003-09-05 11:49 AM


This smoke shows your beauty and show the courage you have toi sustain it all.
Crystal

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7 posted 2003-09-05 11:55 AM


"in the next
one thousand
todays.."

love that line!

gemjop
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8 posted 2003-09-06 10:41 AM


Somewhere much better than this limbo, I hope. Got me thinking about how one day, we wont remember the minute we open our eyes, and he will slip our minds.

have i told ya yet i love ya new pic? the dark suits you, wish i cud carry something like that off, but i cant. not with me scrambled egg hair.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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