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Six Years To Yesterday
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Six Years To Yesterday |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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I know you cried beneath the blade that cut us apart – and even before, when you first glimpsed its cold black edge. Still, the blood you let had another hand to quiet its flow, even as mine continued to pollute the gulf that was opened between us. Those who witnessed yesterday’s demise never saw buried each what if and why, nor the ashes of slaughtered dreams sprinkled salt-like into guilt’s burning open wound. I have long waited in the stillness of arrested time, for any hope of resurrecting the love that died. A lengthening shadow covers me and I feel its darkness slip inside. I remember when mornings offered rest from long nights spent in search of a few moments sleep, where I could steal memories strong enough to hold onto hopes long ago eclipsed by reality. In the six years since yesterday have you once cried for us - has remorse ever glistened on your cheeks? Are any tears left inside, or have they long since disappeared? If just one could fall from your cheek onto mine, I would no longer wonder, how my bloodless heart still beats. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie To reply to the emotive power in this is difficult...just know I am deeply touched by your words here. It is good to see you posting. |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
A heartache magnificently expressed and very well penned. Remember, though it's "Six days to yesterday," It's also ONE day till tomorrow ~ and life moves on! Blessings to you! 'Tiz feathers that make the bird - |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
In the six years since yesterday have you once cried for us - has remorse ever glistened on your cheeks? Are any tears left inside, or have they long since disappeared? If just one could fall from your cheek onto mine, I would no longer wonder, how my bloodless heart still beats. In the six years since yesterday A touching depiction of how time standstill when they step on our hearts. has remorse ever glistened on your cheeks Look at the talented choice of words here, very expressive. In my opinion, what makes a good poet is his/her ability to utilize the “arsenal” of words in a naturally distinct way to express their “hearts” Jamie you have succeeded to convey your feelings in a heart-throbbing way. I admire your poem I know after the “pain” is gone, good hearts shall find a “twin” who deserves them. Salute Iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
In the six years since yesterday have you once cried for us - has remorse ever glistened on your cheeks? Are any tears left inside, or have they long since disappeared? If just one could fall from your cheek onto mine, I would no longer wonder, how my bloodless heart still beats. In the six years since yesterday A touching depiction of how time standstill when they step on our hearts. has remorse ever glistened on your cheeks Look at the talented choice of words here, very expressive. In my opinion, what makes a good poet is his/her ability to utilize the “arsenal” of words in a naturally distinct way to express their “hearts” Jamie you have succeeded to convey your feelings in a heart-throbbing way. I admire your poem I know after the “pain” is gone, good hearts shall find a “twin” who deserves them. Salute Iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jamie~ This is a penning that is so achingly lovely~ 'I have long waited in the stillness of arrested time, for any hope of resurrecting the love that died.' How this thought touched a remember~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
God Jamie..this just aches! Very well worded...reduced me to tears. ~Soft smiles & misty eyes, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Jamie.... I don't think I have read you before...and I am certainly glad I did now!! This piece was very touching and I could really relate... Write some more please? Susan |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
very emotional... great job Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks to each of you for taking the time to read and also for the nice replies. (hugs to martie and marge) There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this aches m'friend....very well expressed and beautifully penned... as usual. Keep smiling honey  Maree. fate is not just |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Jamie...This is a hard one to stomach. I really hope time will heal your hurt and heart...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
What Paul Wilson said J. Thanks for the link, else I never would have seen it - remember that Mmy. No comments on the piece, I don't think it's one to comment on per se. Hugs to you dear friend. K |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
where I could steal memories strong enough to hold onto hopes long ago eclipsed by reality. i may not particularly understand your circumstances but i related strongly to the words above...they seem like something i tell myself often in the day-to-day struggles of living.. hugs, haiku friend  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks again-- and I will Mmy and huggles back to LK J |
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