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Coming Home (Duet by El_Campeador and Littlewing)
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Coming Home (Duet by El_Campeador and Littlewing) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Roses permeate this air I breathe dreams on the tip of my lips a breath of wind . . . and when the mist clears all is swept away Where have you gone? Slipping sand between my fingers hands, cupped for you in solemn prayer I tore another page from the calendar a glimpse of summer Time is fleeting . . . Echoes all I hear As the sun sets upon this hollow shell the moon she whispers to me to us Can you hear her silent plea? Why does this hurt so much? Paradise is what we had until we ate forbidden fruit the path home is my desire Can it come true? Are you willing for it to come true? When are you coming home? |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Excellent!! beautiful..urhhhhhh..and other nice adjectives,verbs,nouns..etc etc *tosses her pen in the trash* for real.... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
speechless |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sheer p-o-e-t-r-y! Are you certain that there were two pens involved in this exceptionally beautiful write?!?   Linda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
amazing write!  love the ending! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Gorgeous write here, and hope to see the two of you getting together to sing duets more often!!! ~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
in solemn prayer I tore another page from the calendar a glimpse of summer Time is fleeting . . . as i write this, more has slipped beneath its clutches. beautiful words, from both of u, written as one......very nice...and who knows when, thats the great mystery i guess |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Two beautiful voices...singing together. Great job. Eric |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Aww... this is so beautiful. Wonderful job, you two! Enjoyed!! ~Tier |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wonderful. This made me sit back in my chair and just SIGH. hugs to you both, Chris |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
WOW!!! SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... especially the ending! *S* Well done duet! *S* |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is so beautifully penned... muchly enjoyed... Regards Sudhir |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
fantastick..the sorrow and religious undertone ballence perfectly  insanity is not a crime |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kris, thank you . . . umm go get that pen missy . . . dont even think about it Raph - thank you Linda - was so easy writing with Ben - the thoughts just melded thank you Thanks Dixie, yes the ending is the sadness for sure Sunny - thank you so much! Was a pleasure writing with Ben Yes, Michele, a mystery indeed one I ponder daily thank you Eric, now I didnt even know I knew how to sing . . . thank you Tier - coming from you means the world to me . . . thank you Chris, EXACTLY a huge SIGH - you got it thank you Thank you Shara Thank you Sudhir, have missed you Liz, I didnt even see that undertone until you mentioned it - thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
 need i say more? Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lovely! Not sure who wrote what, don't even want to know, because the thoughts were seamless, and intriguing...a lot of unanswered questions... |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
I'm glad everyone liked it... It was certainly fun doing a duet. It took more effort than I expected, but it was worth it - the blending of two different poets styles creates a new and unique style that can't be copied writing alone. Thanks, Sue, for working with me...  “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson [This message has been edited by El_Campeador (08-05-2003 04:20 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gem - nope nuff said - thank you Karilea - I know - isnt it weird - our styles just blended perfectly Ben - it was my pleasure to write with you truly and thank you for writing with me - it was a different write for me indeed thanks guys xxoo |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yay! Oh my gosh, this is such a gorgeous duet, sweet friend, I just love all the emphasis put into this and I believe anything can come true if you're just willing to turn around and return home! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You Both, this is a classic, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Sue and El Campeador, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you both! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Noah, so very sweet for bringing this up xxoo |
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