Footsteps - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #28

Footsteps

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-08-29 09:39 AM

In the stone,
Lost in some mountain crumble
Without rain
Yet thunder endless rumble
And footsteps
Move with constantly stumble
Till mountain
Turns to sand;
While I slide
On the ground that is shifting
Go aimless
Within the random drifting
And footsteps
Are no longer fit for lifting
Till the sand
Turns to sea;
By water
The creeps close to my laying,
And soulless
To battered for last praying
Far too parched
For any words now saying
And footsteps
End.

Gloom

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

1 posted 2003-08-29 09:52 AM

great poem, I can really see the imagery,
fantastic keep it up . Rose

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

2 posted 2003-08-29 10:13 AM

I really do love this....this is just superb!

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

3 posted 2003-08-29 10:13 AM

Fascinating. I didn't even feel like I had to read this, as I was. It flows so smoothly. I'm still not even sure what it said. *blinks* But I like it.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

4 posted 2003-08-29 11:22 AM

You flow so well that it seems effortless.Nicely done.
Crystal

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2003-08-29 11:28 AM

Professor,
Well done, enjoyed the read.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2003-08-29 11:41 AM

"To battered for last praying
Far too parched
For any words now saying
And footsteps
End"

Sadly beautiful...*sigh*

I love reading you.

Susan

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

7 posted 2003-08-29 12:25 PM

Thank you, everyone,
for your kind words and praise.

Gloom

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.