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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-08-29 07:32 AM

I shuffle
my feet
as I walk..
moving the earth
with my step.

i can
not
compensate for
all the words
i meant not
to say.

some i refuse
to
replace..

i feel a hurricane
coming..
I know this
means war..

Soon you will
fist out
raindrops
and I
will hail ..
I will break
the glass.

You stole my
pearls by letting them
slip off of your tongue
a silhouette
of your theft.

There's no excuse
for this behavior..
No reason why you
have to
bounce words
off the sides
of the
universe..

I'm standing
right here
and I
am not carrying
deaf ears
or

is it that you can't
percieve me
as a
solid, evident
being?

You watch my
eyes drip..
using my sorrow
as a weapon.

You fiend..
you blew my sky right out.

Now that
I'm gone..
you've yet to
utter my name..

you still lie
about the dreams
you have at night..

A storm is brewing,
boiling over..
the air reeks
with our aftertaste.

A promise murmers
lie..

Now I shuffle
'cross
the sky.

[This message has been edited by Kaoru (08-29-2003 07:36 AM).]

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2003-08-29 08:10 AM

your poetry is something beyond professional...and I love reading you.

good morning to you...how are you doing?
hugs sent your way from your friend in PA.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

2 posted 2003-08-29 08:17 AM

meg...your talent NEVER lets me down...h

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2003-08-29 08:21 AM

Kaoru
A wonderful write, but no surprise.

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

4 posted 2003-08-29 08:35 AM

Sounds like you found another lost pearl ...

... I plan on keeping my eyes open for more!

Have a beautiful morning too, Meg!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2003-08-29 09:55 AM

i can
not
compensate for
all the words
i meant not
to say.

some i refuse
to
replace..
uh huh... some just can't be replaced..

nice piece.. have enjoyed reading your works.always an edge and a style.always to make you think if not feel.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-08-29 09:58 AM

Meg, oh mann do I know this and no, they cannot be taken back, yet you cannot be held forever responsible

i can
not
compensate for
all the words
i meant not
to say.

Awesome writing missy
xxoo

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2003-08-29 10:05 AM

wonderful writing...I felt this knowing its touch.

M

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

8 posted 2003-08-29 10:05 AM

I envy your imagination. There is so much imagery and so many beautiful analogies here.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

9 posted 2003-08-29 10:22 AM

Beautiful style, like acres of colored tulips caressed with time. Very nice Kaoru. Very nice.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

10 posted 2003-08-29 10:27 AM

Megahan, I love this poem!!
Especially this ending....

Now I shuffle
'cross
the sky.

Very good writing, my friend.

Hugs

Ethel

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

11 posted 2003-08-29 11:06 AM

Your talent is amazing and beautiful.I love the way that you see things through your eyes and heart

Crystal

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2003-08-29 11:12 AM

Meg...*sigh*...yet another amazing piece...

"You watch my
eyes drip..
using my sorrow
as a weapon."

There were soooo many good lines in this, but what I quoted above..those words hit home...the main reason I don't cry in front of a man anymore...

You, Meg, are a brilliant writer. I would like to see if you and Icy could put something together...hmmmm...that would be as good as Starbucks Ice cream!!

Susan

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

13 posted 2003-08-29 11:58 AM

Always evocative. I love how you're able to couch such pain and hurt into words as soft as feathers. They still have a punch. Whew.

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

14 posted 2003-08-30 02:03 AM

Now that
I'm gone..
you've yet to
utter my name..

you still lie
about the dreams
you have at night..

*shaking head* I don't know how I missed this.... The imagery is vivid, and the hurt and the pain are written so well, as always.

Kielo

I'll never forget you.... I know that much, despite my foolishness.

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