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Martie

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California

0 posted 2003-08-27 10:06 PM

Blood Brothers

Pink Mimosa shades like umbrella over yard
Spilling memory of the dig of youth’s slender arms
Feathered and fragile reminders of the cost of time
And my curved anticipation waiting to be rhyme

Where does one go to hear the hymn of a chorus
Of neighborhoods where memory is buried in a forest
Where blackberry brambles hold the tattered paperback
With pages turned down next to a bottle in a paper sack

We slid into the culvert with honey hungry thoughts
And touched the satin place of friends forget me not
Even bled into each others wounded brotherhood
You said though I was just a girl I was still pretty good

The culvert’s still a cut of land all filled in redwood trees
And blackberries are the jungle land of children still I see
And the sweet taste of the fruit of youth lingers on my tongue
Where you and I made promise that could never be undone

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from 7-02

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

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in the shadows

1 posted 2003-08-27 10:13 PM

*smile*

Thank you for sharing this.

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

2 posted 2003-08-27 10:14 PM

Thanks for sharing your memories with us.
Crystal

Miah
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since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2003-08-27 10:14 PM

"Pink Mimosa shades like umbrella over yard"

You have a way with words, thanks for the enjoyable read Martie.

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2003-08-27 10:40 PM

Martie
Love that first stanza...a perfect introduction to the theme of the poem.
The rest of the poem is compact, but clear, the last stanza ending the poem exactly where it should. The last two lines remindes me of a Bob Dylan song "Forever Young" Fine poetry, as always....ice/ford

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5 posted 2003-08-28 01:17 AM

On my hand, a scar;
there somehow on yours, the same,
as memory stirs....

Memory stirs of a time several months ago, when you showed me this poem, and I loved it almost as much as I do now. This one a classic.

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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-08-28 02:00 AM

Martie you have such a way with words..you weave beauty..i am in awe

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2003-08-28 09:26 AM

You sent my mind back several decades... and leave me smiling with thoughts of other mimosas and pledges... and being pretty good even though just a girl. *S* Excellent! *S*

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2003-08-28 09:32 AM

MartieSis~
I've shared this one with my brother-of-blood~

I LOVE IT !!!!

All the rich imagery jumps up and tumbles into my remember place~
*HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-08-28 01:48 PM

Martie, this reminds me of when I was five years old and the neighborhood kids about my age were two little boys who lived across the street. I was "one of the boys", climbing trees and all the things they liked to do....until we all got a little older. I missed those days when we were all "brothers". I didn't like it when we became teenagers and one of them wanted me to be his girlfriend. I didn't know until I met Gary that you could also be "best friends" and "in love' at the same time.

Hugs to you

Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-28-2003 01:49 PM).]

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

10 posted 2003-08-28 01:56 PM

martie, hi, how are you doing, this was a stunning read, as all of yours are....thank you for sharing

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

11 posted 2003-09-02 08:04 PM

Oh Martie - how precious...sigh - I loved this - well that is redundant as I love all of your poems - Paul

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