my newest poem - Courage to Fly (free verse)

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Open Poetry #28

my newest poem - Courage to Fly (free verse)

kaleanna
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since 2003-08-18

Posts 89
TX, USA

0 posted 2003-08-27 02:07 PM

Courage to Fly
.
Search your heart, look deep inside
find the courage to fly
Your dreams will come true
if you continue to try
.
the strength is there
all you got to do
is to be willing to fight
for the things you believe in
.
Find the courage to fly
spread your wings and
reach for the stars
That courage is there
if only you look deep inside
.
dont throw in the towel
Take a step, take a leap
reach deep inside
and find your courage to fly
.
find the courage to fly
find the strength that you have deep inside
let your heart be your guide
(written aug 27, 2003)

Meesh

[This message has been edited by kaleanna (08-27-2003 04:57 PM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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1 posted 2003-08-27 02:09 PM

very uplifting!

eminor_angel
Member

since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

2 posted 2003-08-27 04:27 PM

two comments:

1) inconsisten rhyme puts the reader into the realm of unease

2)"is being willing to fight
for the things you believe in"

a grammar mistake, it should read:

"is be willing to fight"

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