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Open Poetry #28

Where Dost Thou Walk?

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-08-27 07:30 AM

How can I find sleep
When my sad eyes can not weep
And my soul does cry,
I stay on these feet
Worn sore by too much of street,
That keeps going by
Each step a tear drop
So my walking can not stop.
Moving is salt tears
Till my soul is new
This journey will not be through
Will I go for years
Ending it all in an ocean deep?

Gloom

Please Note: this is not a poem about suicide, but grief.
Because of the possibility of being misinterpreted
I did change the original writing,
to ‘salt tears’ to give the clue of crying an ocean of tears.

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-08-27 07:32 AM

"Moving is salt tears
Till my soul is new
This journey will not be through
Will I go for years
Ending it all in an ocean deep?"

..these lines are wonderful..

You penned grief..you brought it to life in my head..

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2003-08-27 09:08 AM

this poem made me feel like you want so to give more...but you have, so incredibly...
beautiful thoughts and feelings

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-08-27 09:14 AM

Gloomyone,

Fantastic job! An ocean of tears...

Susan

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