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Fluid Core
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Fluid Core Deep within a mental cell Weeps a soul in simmers dwell Painting rainbows sweet and lush With echoes as its painting brush Dabbing hews of golden skies Silver sands where water lies Forests and their dancing leaves All the things this soul believes Living in a world unclear Its medium the wet of tear Searching in a place of seem Symbiosis in a dream Horizons are its cast of net Bringing in its food of let And though the net is tight of knit Osmosis floors the drag of it It stays within a fluid core A search it seems forevermore. |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
To what we are still searching for, i hope you find. Magnificent |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
How beautiful....you have penned a wonderful poem here...from the kind heart of your soul...thank you for sharing |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
with echoes as it's painting brush. Very nice Seymour. Enjoyed the write. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
mysticpoe Thank you for the kind reply. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Such a touch, Sy... one that stays ingrained...  |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Just amazing as always...always a treat!   SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ Thank you for the read and reply Suede Thank you for the kind response. Sunshine  SharaRose, Your comments are always a pleasure to read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And you are a poet who is cool to the core... and dont take my word for it...lets just look at your words...could these lines of theme, images, personifis, metaphors and rhymes be any cooler..any more cleverly and creatively twisted poetically to create this groovy poem? just look at these lines individually..look at all they emcompass and envision... With echoes as its painting brush "echoes as a brush" yer so kewl  Its medium the wet of tear thats cooler than I have words for.... Horizons are its cast of net And though the net is tight of knit Osmosis floors the drag of it I just adore you and your osmosis  and just look at the imagery in this verse... Dabbing hews of golden skies Silver sands where water lies Forests and their dancing leaves with only 15 words you painted us a landscape of the Sky, the Ocean and the Trees. Your gift to word paint scenes with subtle, tight couplets has always been one of my most fave things about your poetry. And most impressive of all is the way you do this so consistantly well day in and out. You are a bard among bards...a prophet among poets. And that dragon of yours aint half bad either. LOL *winkiewinkie* me loves ya Stinky  You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Your break down of my poem is like a spoon of honey. Your weather all is like raspberry tea I put them together and sip this wonders potion It is to my mind a magic lotion. And am happy that you set me free. WWRS |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You paint as vividly with your pen as you do your brush, my friend... and either medium shares perfection with us. *S* I enjoyed! *S* |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Your gift of rhyming is incredible, Seymour. Keep that pen working! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Your suthern grace is my fireplace. El_Campeador I'll try and thank you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Mr. T. ~ You have the soul of an artist...   EA |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
This was absolutely awesome, the theme really got me, but once I read I completely understand. Again great write. Rose |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Seymour, This is wonderful. So, much to savor in this verse. I have read it several times...and know of what you speak. The search is forever, my friend, to the time on earth we end. That is what I believe. But what do I know? LOL I did so enjoy this write! Patricia |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel And you are an Angel. Rose A rose, is a rose, is a rose, thank you. Patricia, And I did so enjoy your comment, thank you dear. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Dabbing hews of golden skies Silver sands where water lies Forests and their dancing leaves All the things this soul believes Such a beautiful write to-day dear Seymour. I have been so busy with the new pup, and Enchantress has been on holiday....we have missed tea and goodies together. Ah, but the kettle is on for an afternoon sip, and cinnamon buns are freshly iced. Let's enjoy! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris, I'm starting to get a little jealous of that pup. LOL Be right there for tea nad stuff. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Seymour, you paint such beautiful pictures in my mind. I love your rhyme, my friend. It's just beautiful.  Hugs Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethel, Thank you for the like and for the read. |
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