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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2003-08-04 08:02 AM




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Promised Presence


... and on the seventh day ...
           there were butterflies on the beach ...



The fading stars wept sanguine tears,
staining the moon mauve as it lingered late
on a warm September morn ... for it too ...
wanted to witness the waves with us as
dawn saturated the sky in salmon splendor.

  
{ Did you know } ...
There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance.

Twilight pales as the horizon exhales and the
naked sky unveils dawn's deliverance.
Sunrise seduces the satin shore turning the surf
to stained glass, reflecting champagne clouds
as the waves stretch across sultry suede sand.

We wandered the beach barefoot and carefree ...
wading in the bay's blue waved reverie.
Waiting for dolphins, watching the gulls in swoon,
wondering the secret they cry as they swoop and fly ...
leaving their cryptic calligraphy where ever they land
upon the topaz tanned sand and taupe dusted dunes.

Rose colored clouds concealed the Monet moon as
crimson tinged tides curl towards the pastel shore.
It was then the warm wind whispered the words
I had heard so many times before ...



"You are there, yet still here with me"
"Butterflies are meant to be free "...



And in that fragmented moment ...
promised on pages of chapter, verse, and rhyme,
we found them falling in fragile flutter.


"memories pressed between precious moments in time"

A stir of echoes on an endless flight ...
enticed upon autumn's auburn invite,
Monarch messiahs held to migration's rite.

Instinct's insist of the season in summons ...
a sequestered few sacrificed themselves on
surf soaked sand, and it was there upon a
destined beach of unconditional understand,
I held the miracle of your traces left behind
in my trembling hand.


{and wasn't it was just the day before,
that I had traced you in the grains of
time and gave you back to the tides.}


An epilogue born of ritual became an epiphany of rare.
Velvet winged empyreans penned a poetic epitaph across
a promised sky ... serving proof you were still there.

Finally at peace in the knowing all things promised had
now come to be ... there was only parting's sweet sorrow
as I left you and my heart on a crystal blue bay christened
by a sacred sea.


"You are there, yet still here with me"
"Butterflies are meant to be free" ...




~*~

     


Pics from Chesapeake Bay, VA


"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-04-2003 01:25 PM).]

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Duncan
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1 posted 2003-08-04 08:09 AM


Mornin' JM...Haven't read it yet, just wanted to prove I was up this early!!  
I'll be back....

gemjop
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2 posted 2003-08-04 08:09 AM


JM?

This is art! Wow, the presentation, and sentiments..moved me to tears this afternoon.

This is such a treasure...I can't say what i want to, I'm in awe.

Just beautiful.

Your words are just..oooh.



Safe forever now, in my library.

love
gem
xxxx

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El_Campeador
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3 posted 2003-08-04 08:11 AM


Wow. This is simply incredible, Janet Marie. I will save this in my library.

And you make me long for the beach again...

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 2003-08-04 08:13 AM


Ah! The colours, the images and the sensory ride this work takes one through as if the vibrant nature of the heart is painted on the wide universal canvas with emotions, and yet as unique as unique can be from the pen of a brilliant poetess...

your words move mountains and more... really...

regards
sudhir

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2003-08-04 08:28 AM


JM,
Randy is rubbing his eyes in emotion and mine are misty with serene. How can we find our way if we can't see?
WWRS

cusick
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6 posted 2003-08-04 08:55 AM


Janet this is so beautiful and the images are taylor made for the poem. Enjoyed. Maggie
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7 posted 2003-08-04 08:57 AM


Well, Hello Gorgeous.

I read this aloud, and oh you have birthed a beautiful child my girlie.

The language is silk, and the pace is slow but steady, just like a sunrise.

You have taken ordinary words and woven them together to capture sacred truths. This leaves me with an awe of wonder, lady. The same hushed feeling that came over me when viewing the Grand Canyon at sunset--and the same sense of miracle the first time I felt my baby kick inside of me.

You have written a symphony.

Brava, Jan. I toss you roses.


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8 posted 2003-08-04 09:12 AM


An epilogue born of ritual became an epiphany of rare.
Velvet winged empyreans penned a poetic epitaph across
a promised sky ... serving proof you were still there.

~*~

All of it, a vast promise...all of it, a beautiful twist of a muse's delight...

but the lines here, that, m'dear, is the promise...that you will always be a poet, and that when your muse does grant you your wish...she does it with style, class, and verve...


nakdthoughts
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9 posted 2003-08-04 09:17 AM


Twilight pales as the horizon exhales and the
naked sky unveils dawn's deliverance.
Sunrise seduces the satin shore, the surf turns
to stained glass, reflecting champagne clouds
as the waves stretch across sultry suede sand.
very beautiful JanetMarie...it has been a long time since I walked the beaches and you have certainly brought back some pleasant memories..thank you

Maureen

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10 posted 2003-08-04 10:01 AM


More beautiful than an elven write -- truly a word painting and a soul bath.  Though obviously a personal matter, this poem makes me intensely curious regarding the inspired tribute and homage...  Welcome back.

-MVS

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Patricia
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11 posted 2003-08-04 10:08 AM


JM...Oh my goodness! This is incredible.  I am so amazed...so many lines I could have quoted.  Dang, woman, I am speechless except to tell you this is a keeper!

Patricia

Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2003-08-04 10:23 AM


JM,

Beautifully written.  I was there on the sea..watching your words rise and take flight...

Susan C.

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13 posted 2003-08-04 10:28 AM


JanetMarie~
As lovely a write as I've ever seen flow from the ink of you~

'There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance.'


Breathlessly I read ... and will come to this knowing again and again dear poetess~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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SharaRose
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14 posted 2003-08-04 10:30 AM


"Sigh" Awestruck!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Martie
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15 posted 2003-08-04 11:26 AM


Janet Marie

I can't write the the way this made me feel...tears of understanding here, my friend...for your heart and the beauty and knowledge that it holds.  Thank you for sharing this very special time with us.  A treasure of words!  Love you, girlie!

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16 posted 2003-08-04 11:31 AM


...a true work of art. I am speechless, Janet Marie. Adding this to my Library.
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17 posted 2003-08-04 12:54 PM


a sequestered few sacrificed themselves on
surf soaked sand, and it was there upon a
destined beach of unconditional understand,
I held the miracle of your traces left behind
in my trembling hand.

You may complain about your muse being missing in action... but when she gifts you, she leaves diamonds... that sparkle with smiles shining through heart tears.

That's not thunder from the heavens, gal... that's applause from one whose love stayed with you even when migration into another life was ordained... coming from the sky he gave you.

A promise fulfilled... and a blessing. *S* This is superb!

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Honeybee
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18 posted 2003-08-04 01:10 PM


JM, it's good to see you posting again in open and I'm with the others: this is a work of art and is a keeper.

Excellent use of images/themes/alliteration....a beautiful write girlie.  And 'monarch messiahs," "staining the moon mauve," "Velvet winged empyreans," "Rose colored clouds concealed the Monet moon".....how frieken cool are those lines?

You inspire me yanno...the only difference is that you're the butterfly, I'm the moth

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

JamesMichael
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19 posted 2003-08-04 03:27 PM


"You are there, but still here with me."
Lovely thoughts...James

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20 posted 2003-08-04 04:18 PM


There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance

Janet Marie~ Your writing is a lovely pause.
This is absolutely breathtaking,  and so beautiful.
You dear lady, give me reason to smile between my tears.

You have such a graceful way of reaching the heart,
and capturing a moment in the right light.  Thank you sweets.

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21 posted 2003-08-04 06:18 PM


Janet Marie - this is stunning. I lived near the bay for awhile and miss it muchly. I can't say enough words to express my thoughts when I read this. Excellent...

BC

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22 posted 2003-08-04 07:35 PM



Enjoyed the read

Nicole
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23 posted 2003-08-04 10:50 PM


I just threw all my pens away!!

It's amazing what comes from that which inspires - you shine normally, but damn girlie, right now you *radiate*.

hugs!
Nic

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24 posted 2003-08-04 10:58 PM


Your poetic presence always delivers its promises...

The indepth, caring replies that you have received are a good indication of the magnificence of your poetic talent!


EA

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25 posted 2003-08-04 11:19 PM


"...a promised pause just before morning is born"....

"Sunrise seduces the satin shore turning the surf
to stained glass..."

"Rose colored clouds concealed the Monet moon..."

"Velvet winged empyreans penned a poetic epitaph across
a promised sky ... serving proof you were still there."

I'll tell you this, oh thou lepidopterist's delight....those inset pictures are very nice, but with imagery like this you don't need 'em at all. I could see these beautiful shorelines completely, with no guidance other than your words, and catch the internal substance of the emotion at the same time -- a third dimension no picture can relate. A beautiful piece of writing, and a piece of written beauty.

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Janet Marie
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26 posted 2003-08-05 12:37 PM




Could you guys be any cooler if you tried???
I had something come up tonite and so I am running late getting on here to thank you each of you for these awesome replies...but promise to do so in the morn..
So until then the moth is humbled and grateful.
Thanks all you groovy gals and guys...very much


"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Mark Bohannan
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27 posted 2003-08-05 12:40 PM


and on the seventh day ...
           there were butterflies on the beach
***********
Did ya doubt that Nature's painting that day would give anything less???? hmmmm????? Still you doubt the power
***********

for it too ...
wanted to witness the waves with us as
dawn saturated the sky in salmon splendor
**************
And you know as well as I that it did witness not only the saturation of dawn's birth, but the total devotion given from two hearts in that moment of succumb.
***************
There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance.
************
This verse is one of golden promises birthed no less in a garden of two hearts instead of one from so long ago.  I will admit that back then, I could only hope you would see and learn and now I smile between tears knowing that you write and see with eyes shut and your soul guiding you without thought.
************
Sunrise seduces the satin shore turning the surf
to stained glass, reflecting champagne clouds
as the waves stretch across sultry suede sand
***********
Sweets ... never doubt that it was you that seduced the shore that day from pure innocence of will and overflowing desire of heart.  
***********
wondering the secret they cry as they swoop and fly ...
leaving their cryptic calligraphy where ever they land
***********
If it were not secrets being whispered just out of ear shot and a language without puzzle ... would it not lose it's appeal from full understanding?
***********
It was then the warm wind whispered the words
I had heard so many times before ...


"You are there, yet still here with me"
"Butterflies are meant to be free "...

***********
You my dear are free.  Free from the captive heart that never felt ... free from the eyes that gazed but never saw ... and free from the smells, taste, touch, and fantasies of someones elses interpretation.
***********
Monarch messiahs held to migration's rite.

Instinct's insist of the season in summons ...
a sequestered few sacrificed themselves on
surf soaked sand, and it was there upon a
destined beach of unconditional understand,
I held the miracle of your traces left behind
in my trembling hand.

{and wasn't it was just the day before,
that I had traced you in the grains of
time and gave you back to the tides.}

************
And so comes that ohhhhhh so famous quote of Kahlil Gibran.  (you know the one)

You set it free to the tides and it came back
to not only in the tides but in full color with a heartbeat that multiplied in beats with each flutter of wings.
************
An epilogue born of ritual became an epiphany of rare.
Velvet winged empyreans penned a poetic epitaph across
a promised sky ... serving proof you were still there.
************
Pure poetic gold this verse is and one I admire in you and the understanding of where it came from.
************
Finally at peace in the knowing all things promised had
now come to be ... there was only parting's sweet sorrow
as I left you and my heart on a crystal blue bay christened
by a sacred sea
************
Were it not for the parting, we would not know the heart of absence and then there would be no understanding the true depth of impact that these days gifted us with.
************
"You are there, yet still here with me"
************
And forever I "we" shall be my sweets.  Never doubt that pull of monet moon on the tides of this heart.  Forever "we" shall be.

---------------------
Aside from the above comments on this piece, I find a true treasure of poetic passion in this one.  The alliterations are superb, the rhyme .... well, I love when you slip a rhyme in.  You above all know the power of rhyme over me and you sprinkle them in perfectly.  IMAGERY ...... IMAGERY ........ IMAGERY!!!!!!!!!!! Dang sweets, how much can a man handle? LOL  You have grasp the eye of heavenly knowledge and painted with the hands of your heart in such a magnificant way that I have to admit, I am jealous of your vision but smile knowing that no one deserves to see it better than you.  You my dearest friend have chosen your vocabulary with a total control of pen without losing your reader and you have given nothing less than your heart and soul in this whole piece.  I commend you on your talents m'lady and hope you know the total exilleration I feel from reading this.  

I love you my friend and stand proud to be able to say it to winds of the world.

vlraynes
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28 posted 2003-08-05 02:38 AM



Oh...mothyone...I am SO glad I found this tonight.  
This, my friend, is a true masterpiece,
in every sense of the word.

It's late, and I am tired, but I WILL be back to this one.
Just wanted you to know that I was here...I read...and I felt every word.

Love and hugs to you, lady..

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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29 posted 2003-08-05 02:54 AM


so many good parts...just beautiful, just an awesome presentation...

into my library!

EagleOne
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30 posted 2003-08-05 10:07 AM


Love the title, and the poem!

i'm not saying anybody's wrong or right,
just know i'd die to be with you tonight ~ sandford

Janet Marie
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31 posted 2003-08-05 10:13 AM


Duncan ... Im gonna hold ya to it  LOL  bout time you got up off the porch early. heh

Gem ... girlie ya make me smile.. thank you...its an honor and pleasure to be kept by you. *S* thanks for this sweet reply.

EL C ... thank you for your kind response... yes..once we have seen the waves..its hard not to be near them all the time. Thanks for coming by. *S*

Sud ... and your words move me...thank you for this lovely reply..your response reads like poetry...youre pretty brilliant yourself *S*  thanks groovy guy.

Sy-babes ... just follow your heart... its always got you there before
tell Randy not to cry...we will have to relight his pilot Thank you Stinkylove.

cusick ... thank you for your kind remarks and welcome to Poetry Land..so nice to meet you. *S*

Sen ... and Im blowing you smooches.. thank you baby...yeah..I gotta do something bout these long labors  lol  The muse leaves and then when she comes back she wont shut up ... but I am so grateful for every word ... seeing the ocean left me so awestruck and inspired...I just want to do all I felt in that time justice. Thank you me twin. love you.

Kari ... you humble me with your praise and I know the sincerety of it and I thank you for all your support of my work. Ive been very fortunate to have been given the chance to know this kind of inspiration. Thank you me sunshine-girlie for the warmth you radiate. *S*

Maureen ... thank you so much...I hope you will be able to return to the tides soon...
we all need that respite. thank you for stopping by. *S*

Mark ... thank you poet sir...what a wonderful reply ... this one has several muses of spirit .. the butterfly past, the aquarian present and the ocean, all of which hold my heart...and inspire me in so many ways.  thanks so much ! *S*

Patricia ... thank you for such a exhuberant reply!!  Its an honor to be in your library, Im sure I am in fine company. *S* thanks so much.

Susan ... what a lovely response , thank you for allowing my words to take you there. *S*

Marge ...   The verse you highlighted was the one I wanted to try and capture some of the euphoria I felt sitting on the beach each morn with MC waiting for the sunrise. I'm not sure there will be adequate words to do the beauty I saw there but I am grateful for the inspiration and more so for the things realized in the tides. Thank you for your kind reply. *S*

SharaRose .. thank you for the sweet reply..your pen name is lovely. thanks. *S*

Martie ... youre so sweet.. thank you...for I know that you know where this all comes from and your understanding and acceptance mean the world to me.
love you too me girlie.

Denise ... Hi there!!.. I am so happy to see your name here..thank you so much
for your lovely response...we are all looking for those "wings to rise above"  *wink*  *S* thanks Denise.

Ruth ... your reply reads like poetry my dear... thank you for such a beautiful and "all knowing" response. And yes... he has left me with so many gifts...and for all my whining bout my moody muse I am so grateful for the inspiration. Thanks Ruthie-girl...for the "superb" and the acceptance...cuz you know that i know..you know.


Melis ... nice try girlie *S*...but I have read your poetry and seen your pic...your are a butterfly dear one... thank you for such a sweet reply.What else could I expect from a Honey Bee *S* thanks girlie.

SBJ ... thank you for the lovely and for coming by. *S*

Lori ... your reply has a light of its own ... thank you so much for this gracious response... you make me mothy heart smile. Thanks Lori-girl.. very much. *S*

Bill .. thank you for the stunning... and yes...how can we not miss something so incredibly beautiful ... thank you poet sir. *S*

Legion ... thank you so much for coming by.. Welcome to Poetry Land..nice to have you here. *S*

Nic ... dont you dare throw away those pens.. *S* .. thank you for such a sweet reply!!  I havent forgot about the sites I want to send you...its crazy here getting ready for our trip... I'll be in touch.

Linda... oooh I love it when you alliterate LOL  thank you for your kind words...
yes.. I am so fortunate to have all these generous replies,... I apprciate you all so much. thanks so much. *S*

Ed ... what did you just call me??? LOL ... haha Ok.. I went and looked up the word..and got a big smile when I saw it.. thank you poet sir..your reply is a piece of poetry in its self. TY!!! *S*

Mark ... I'll be back to reply to you shortly.

Vicky... hey girlie...thank you... get some rest...take your time..Im not going anywhere. *wink*

Dixie ... thank you for the awesome and for the honor of being in your library. *S*

Eddie... hey you... so good to see you groovy guy.. thanks so much.!! *S*


You guys are cooler than I have words for and your encouragement of my work
overwhelms  me at the same time it enlightens me.. I thank you all sincerely.
love to poetry land.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Janet Marie
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32 posted 2003-08-05 10:59 AM


quote:
I will admit that back then, I could only hope you would see and learn and now I smile between tears knowing that you write and see with eyes shut and your soul guiding you without thought.


( As you are the one who taught me how to do this...you will already know what those words mean to me)

Mark ... Since you know me so well, you know that I am smiling thru tears at your response...I wanted this piece to be special for many reasons. Im not sure I will ever see in my words, all that I felt in those amazing days there with you and the ocean.
Im not sure there are enough words to do justice to all I saw and learned.
But I am so very very grateful for the memories and the inspiration.
Long before I ever saw the ocean, it was your poetry, your gift for imagery and insight and the things you taught me about how to paint with words, that inspired me to work on the imagery of my own poetry...before I always focused on the emotions and rhyme or structure. So I thank you for the lessons of seeing with the heart and spirit rather than the eyes.  As to this write...from the beginning, when you promised you were gonna make sure I saw the ocean, you also said Vante' would let me know he was there...Now you know I dont doubt your Aquarian powers..but my goodness ... how grand is migrating Monarchs on the shore.   There is so much I could say.. I've been so extraordinarily blessed to have been able to spend this time with you and experience the exquisitry of both the mountains and the ocean...there are so many exceptional moments of discovery...and I hope my pen will find the words to encompass the pure anticipation and exhilaration I felt walking in the tides with you,
for all I have learned from you..all that we have shared in the past 3 years....all that you gave me when you wrote my name in the sand and turned it into a promise kept.

Thank you MC ... heart and soul ... always.
I love you too  

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Duncan
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33 posted 2003-08-05 07:14 PM


"Instinct's insist of the season in summons ...
a sequestered few sacrificed themselves on
surf soaked sand, and it was there upon a
destined beach of unconditional understand,
I held the miracle of your traces left behind
in my trembling hand.

{and wasn't it was just the day before,
that I had traced you in the grains of
time and gave you back to the tides.}

An epilogue born of ritual became an epiphany of rare.
Velvet winged empyreans penned a poetic epitaph across
a promised sky ... serving proof you were still there.

Finally at peace in the knowing all things promised had
now come to be ... there was only parting's sweet sorrow
as I left you and my heart on a crystal blue bay christened
by a sacred sea.

"You are there, yet still here with me"
"Butterflies are meant to be free" ..."

Ya know, I remember reading other "chapters" of this story before we met and it always intriqued me.  Then we met, you told me the story...and it is one I think about more than you know.  And now, you have found a peace, a completeness (Is that a word?  Oh well...is now) to the cycle.  Yet, the cycle, by definition, does not end.  And somehow (I'm impressed) you've written it all in this one.
Sometimes when I've read something you've written, from the heart, without the exagerated thought that you and I tend to give every single word     I can feel how raw the moment still is for you.  THAT is poetry.  
Or maybe I'm just really tired...

[This message has been edited by Duncan (08-05-2003 07:20 PM).]

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34 posted 2003-08-05 10:19 PM


there upon a
destined beach of unconditional understand,
I held the miracle of your traces left behind
in my trembling hand.

{and wasn't it was just the day before,
that I had traced you in the grains of
time and gave you back to the tides

my my
very beautiful
and running the gamut of emotion

I'd say
it's time to turn the tables on that
finicky muse
Lock HER in a prison

so you can be free
to write
like this
more often

wow

Janet Marie
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35 posted 2003-08-06 12:21 PM


Duncan ... thank you for such a sincere reply...pretty emotional for a porch puppy
I still remember your reply to Promised Sky and the way you connected with the meaning.
That was bout the time we made you an honorary moth
Thanks Dunc.

Brian ... thank you poet sir for your kind reply... me thinks my moody muse has had the key all along...she just likes making me work for her. Thanks for stopping by groovy guy.


thanks again to everyone for all these very cool replies.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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with you
36 posted 2003-08-06 01:04 PM


"{ Did you know } ...
There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance."


yes...Janet....I knew...
this is beyond words for me, I know, you know, I know

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37 posted 2003-08-06 01:55 PM


There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance.


Janet Marie, this is beautiful beyond words.

And yes, I do know.

Thank you for sharing this masterpiece with us, dear MothyOne.  
Hugs  
Ethel

Janet Marie
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38 posted 2003-08-06 09:06 PM


Susan & Ethel ...
I now know too...and it was the most amazing discovery...I dont know which I loved more
dawn or midnight...the ocean is as stunning under the stars as is it by day.
Thank you me groovy girlies.


"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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39 posted 2003-08-07 12:33 PM


And in that fragmented moment ...

"memories pressed between precious moments in time"

A stir of echoes on an endless flight ...


you are just that, you know....yes you do....I miss the sea, but often find my self standing on the edge of the shore, looking out.....it calls you doesnt it? I hear it all the time.....you know I love this....every feeling in each word I so understand....love ya butterfly,  keep flying on those winds that are so precious....heart hugssss




Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

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40 posted 2003-08-07 12:35 PM





The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you


[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-07-2003 12:38 AM).]

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41 posted 2003-08-07 12:51 PM


WOW!!!!I'm in awe of you
angelblueyes

Janet Marie
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42 posted 2003-08-07 07:06 AM



Lauren ... yes...it does indeed call us...
whispers on the wind
Thank you Lauren..for all that I have found in your words and knowing that you know and understand the same in mine. Butterfly bonds are a gift found in the traces left behind.
Your beautiful signature says it all

Angel ... thank you for your sweet enthusiasm...I cant take all the credit for this, I had some amazing inspirations and influences. Thanks so much.





THANK YOU again to ALL who shared so much with me on this thread.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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43 posted 2003-08-08 12:05 PM


You know something? Every time I read you I feel I know you more.
You know what I think of your amazing talent, so I will just say this really moved me.


hugs,
Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

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44 posted 2003-08-08 11:16 AM


Hey Dee girlie...so glad you got to see this one. Yes to read me is to know me...I only know how to write what I feel.
thanks groovy girl.


"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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45 posted 2003-08-08 03:58 PM


Janet Marie, the beauty of this jumped off the screen and into my heart and soul.

You are an exquisite writer and I am always excited when I see your name listed. When I grow up I hope I can write just like you!

Thank you for sharing such fabulous words and pictures.

Hugs to you, Marti

Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts.  A.Einstein

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46 posted 2003-08-08 04:01 PM


gawd my back... I've been doing alot of that today awesome..just brillant...speechless and stuff...

Kristen

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47 posted 2003-08-08 04:03 PM



Just sitting here...
watching all of the poets
give one great group sigh...

who said it up there?  Mark?  
Bri?  That we need to lock up
your muse and just let YOU
go to it?

Janet Marie
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48 posted 2003-08-09 02:39 AM


Marti ... thank you seems too little to say for such a gracious and encouraging reply.
You humble me... I appreciate your sinceretry and kindness so much...
And you write with your own style and magic...and do it much more often than my moody muse. Thanks you so very much.

Kristen ... dont ya love when its a good poetry day.
thanks you so much... your "speechless and stuff" made me smile.

Kari... me thinks you are biased but me loves ya anyway
Any one ever tell ya-youre cute when you gloat  LOL
thank you sunnyone... very much for your support and encouragement of my work.


Ok.. the moth is heading out for Chicago late this evening...(Sat.)
and wont be back till Tuesday.
you guys be good and well inspired.
my love to poetry land.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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49 posted 2003-08-09 02:25 PM


I came here today with my heart full of sadness, feeling numb, needing something and this is what I found.
I cannot fully express how I am feeling except to say that the beauty and passion in your poetry is so vivid and real that I  cannot dwell in my empty heart.
So glad I stopped by Passion's today.


Deb

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50 posted 2003-08-09 03:03 PM


"{ Did you know } ...
There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance."

Dear Janet Marie..
You have once again managed to expertly reduce me to a puddle of tears.
Your writing has such depth and meaning,
not just to you, but to other readers and
writers, who feel deep within their soul.  
I too have seen a place which left me with such awe, that I was left speechless..humbled,... and with a great sense of being overwhelmingly loved.

This is a masterpiece!
You are one very gifted lady..
and therefore whenever your name pops up...
I know to reach for the kleenex and wait
for absolute silence before I start to read you.
You...and this piece are rare treasures.
Thank you for gracing these pages.
~Heart hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

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51 posted 2003-08-09 04:21 PM


Did ya miss me????  
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52 posted 2003-08-09 05:10 PM




(big hugggssssssss) YAY!!! Oh Janet, this is one of your best, sweet friend, this to me had an incredibly spirituality, almost like you yourself were making your own world of love in seven days and though nothing lasts forever, love is still flittering like the butterflies and certianly they will migrate to you when you paint your next spring! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I only wish I could read your gorgeous poetry more often, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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53 posted 2003-08-13 07:20 PM


quote:
{ Did you know } ...
There is a promised pause just before morning is born ...
when the sky sleeps nude and the tides coincide with the
coast in an alluring interlude. A moment chaste in rebirth
when the horizon holds it's breath in awed anticipation and
all that can be heard in this blue hued hesitation is the
contenting cadence of the wave's constance.
Yes oh how I know this!  I just thought I was the only once who knew it.
quote:
You are there, yet still here with me"
"Butterflies are meant to be free "...

You know, yes you do, that this always makes me cry, and here I sit in tears, on my third read of this piece that is beyond any words I have to offer.
quote:
Finally at peace in the knowing all things promised had
now come to be ... there was only parting's sweet sorrow
as I left you and my heart on a crystal blue bay christened
by a sacred sea.
That did it!  That right there, along with all the most beautiful words chosen like precious gems to make this poem what it was.

Janet Marie I am beyond words but will simply humbly thank you for sharing this part of you.

This gets a special place in my book of poetry favorites.  I love it when you write from your very soul. Enuf said, exquisite!


Yes, butterflies are meant to be free.

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (08-13-2003 07:21 PM).]

Janet Marie
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54 posted 2003-08-14 04:00 PM


"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (08-14-2003 04:10 PM).]

Janet Marie
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55 posted 2003-08-14 04:10 PM


I'm sorry I took so long to come thank you all, and I thank those of you who emailed to check in on me worried that I hadnt been posting. I was in Chicago for several days and I am still trying to catch up both here and at home, it will be a few days before I can get back in the forums for any real reading and replying, so please dont worry if the moth is quiet for a bit longer.

Deb... I am sorry to hear youre feeling so sad...if my words lifted you this way, then I am grateful for that chance. Thank you for this beautiful response. Its nice to see your name here in the blue pages again...I hope you find healing in the poetry.


Nancy... your reply leaves a mere moth humbled and smiling, thank you so much for your beautiful reaction to this.  

Duncan         lol

Noah ... thanks so much groovy guy...we missed you round here. Hope you had a wonderful vaction.  

Sharon ... the words you found were poetry to this moths ears...thank you so very much for your enthusiastic reply to this one, I'm so glad you got to see it....
yes --I know you know.

******

thank you seems too little to say for these wonderful, encouraging replies to this special to my heart piece, I am grateful to all who took the time to come by and share the view with me.

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56 posted 2003-08-29 01:04 PM


"And in that fragmented moment ...
promised on pages of chapter, verse, and rhyme,
we found them falling in fragile flutter."

Ahhh, dear, dear, JM, and how could it not have been so. It is as the old saying goes, "You would have had to have been there"..Well, you did the next best thing..you brought us there..very well indeed..very gentle smile

Janet Marie
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57 posted 2003-08-29 09:05 PM


Logan.





(thank you)

When was the last time you felt high
Oh you were the best I've ever felt
Its so wrong not to be with you
Its getting harder to stay away.

SH

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