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...Pleasure In Things That Have Passed...
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...Pleasure In Things That Have Passed... |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough 
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I've buried and mourned the loss of many things in my life. Matter of fact, I've buried peices of myself on more than one occasion. Sometimes, just for the memory of could have beens and things that were, I visit that stone temple that I constructed for the bones left behind. It is then that I realize, and appreciate the pleasure in things that have passed. I've died a million times within my own heart, and soul. No wreaths, or black dresses to mark the occasion. Only another stone atop the temple, that houses the strings of the heart that were severed. Secret anniversaries, hidden and remembered only by me. Candles are never lit to mark the occasion, only thoughts remind me of the pleasure in things that have passed. The soul that cried soon died, and a new life gave birth to a heart that learned to see death as a beginning and not an end. For, had that girl not gave out of breath and determination the woman that is here today could not have been. The temple is high and sturdy now, it houses many dark and dangerous moments. Moments of the heart, buried, yet still alive to remind The pleasure in things that have passed. ...On days like today when I remember the moments that I have placed within the temple... I pitch a white rose from my mind, and kneel for a word, with the girl that passed, and I know that she is proud of the woman that lived to tell the story Of how one can take pleasure in things that have passed. A woman has got to love a bad man once or twice in her life, to be thankful for a good one. -Majorie Kinnan Rawlings- [This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (08-24-2003 12:37 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"Secret anniversaries, hidden and remembered only by me." I must not be the only one that remembers things .. secret things held only in the heart and soul.. Fantastic write. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
oh my this is another fabulous penning by a terrific poetess,,, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God Tima! We are so much alike, yaknow? Wow! What a write! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Magnificent in every way!!!! I appreciated the idea of looking back on the things of the past that make us what we are today. Truly a great write here....~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Tima . . . you have no idea how you have echoed the thoughts within my own head. EVERY single line . . . perfection I pitch a white rose from my mind, and kneel for a word, with the girl that passed, and I know that she is proud of the woman that lived to tell the story Good for you and yes, she is . . . as am I xxoo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tima, Good thoughts, good write, good read. enjoyed. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Taking pleasure in the past - can only be matched by taking equal pleasure in the moment... What more could there be??... Nicely penned, ta...  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Tima, I totally relate to this. A beautiful write, dear lady.  Hugs  Ethel |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Kaoru - We all have these "hidden" places, that belong entirely to us! Thank you for your kind words. QjQ - What a sweet man you are, glad you enjoyed this one. Dixie - YES! We are all bonded more than we know or realize. Kinna like a secret sister thing I guess. I Always wanted a sister, because I was the only girl in our house...guess that is why God gave me a little girl! So glad that I was able to touch you, and even happier that you enjoyed it. Sunnyone - Glad I could give you a memory. I was up late on a Saturday night digging through the rubble that my yesterday's have left behind. Sue - You, Me, and Dix! We needa get together and do that poem that we were going to do. Life has us all busy I guess. It will happen when the time is right! I guess I was pitching that White Rose for all of us that have left the past somewhere else, and moved on to greener pastures! So glad that you like it! Seymour - Thank You m'friend Nan - YES! I take much pleasure in the moments that fill my life these days, remembering where I come from and what I survived makes it even sweeter. Thank You Nan! Ethel - I love to write things that others can relate to, and understand. Thank you for the compliments partner poetess! You are all wonderful people, and the encouragement only fuels the flame behind my pen! THANK YOU ALL! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Tima, I like these couplets. They may not be metered or rhyme  , but one thing I'm particularly fond of is the way that you control your use of contraries by coupling lines together. Like these two: quote:It's a very good bit of wisdom to pass on. From the point of view of style, I think this is rather nicely done... you keep it simple, the way wisdom poetry ought to be. Good job, Tima. Brian |
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