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My Shadow
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My Shadow |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
There's a shadow that follows me Tries to grab hold and won't set me free Lurks there waiting for the chance To watch my breath take it's last dance I watch it as I move along Knowing soon I will have to be strong Like a darkness that can't be cut with a knife To let in even a pinhole of light As I close my eyes to sleep The shadow starts to slowly creep It covers me like a heavy weight Hoping forever I will stay in this state My heart feels like it's being pinched in two Screaming with pain, what do I do Like having my heart on a board And someone pushing, until it bursts forevermore This shadow has come to take my soul And make me lose complete control But just when it thinks it's won the fight I bolt right up and open my eyes Breathing, like there's no oxygen for me My heart beating from that awful dream I laugh at the shadow once more For like a brave warrior, I have won another score Crystal |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Whew! Those are not what I'd call pleasant nights! You recreated them quite vividly--almost too vividly! I've decided to stay up a bit later tonight--with the lights on!   Linda |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Creepy. I wonder what lurks behind the shadow...? -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
For a second there I thought you were writing about me  Excellent write here and so heartfelt!!  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
All I can say is whoa. It is an intense poem. Like I was waiting for the next thing to happen. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
~ ~ ~terrifically written!!!!!~ ~ ~ |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Linda:Hope you were able to sleep well my friend  Mark:Hmmm that's a good question. Saunni:Thank you.If it comes from the heart, it helps to release the fear. the_loner_23: Thank you for reading and responding QJQ: Thank you Crystal |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Crystal~ This piece had such impact ... now that's good writing~ 'I laugh at the shadow once more' I like that ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Crystal: Good for you . . I adored this write sounds like my sleeping habits xxoo |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Marge:Thank you.That's the first time anyone has said my writing has impact. littlewing:Some habits are hard to break, but I'm determined to have a peaceful night's sleep Crystal |
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