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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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0 posted 2003-08-21 02:45 AM

feather
fans
across the lids
it just seems
my eyes are closed--
don't you dare assume a thing--
follow me
(the following)
breaks the valley
"oh-what-cheek!"
as the river runs...

"Home."
I swallow with my eyes.
I should keep this sanitized--
(home)
I am
that am
will cease
in the face
of used-to-be,
gathering my skirt to hip--
squatting crepe around my knees--
we laughed about the present tense
and then we hit the road.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-21-2003 03:34 AM).]

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-08-21 03:12 AM

This is GREAT!

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2003-08-21 07:26 AM

Bound for the future, no doubt...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-08-21 09:26 AM

Have read this half-a-dozen...I'll make it a baker's before I'm through...Into the Library...

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2003-08-21 09:49 AM

hmmmmmmmmm...nothing compares to reading Karen first thing in the morning...

present/past/future, are they really that different if we are the same?

I loved it Karen..

Susan

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2003-08-21 09:56 AM

serenity,
I would rather end it
And then we hit
the trapeze.
LOL enjoyed.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2003-08-21 10:47 AM

nice

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2003-08-21 10:54 PM

""oh-what-cheek!"
as the river runs..."

Feel better now? grin

"we laughed about the present tense
and then we hit the road."

Indeed...

Love ya, lady..
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2003-08-22 01:34 PM

Karen:

where do these lines come from?

I swallow with my eyes.

brilliant . . God I could see you doing just that . . .
enjoy the journey please
xxoo

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

9 posted 2003-08-22 01:37 PM

"Home."
I swallow with my eyes.
I should keep this sanitized--
(home)
I am
that am
will cease
in the face
of used-to-be,

Eliptical or a mobius strip... we all cease in the face of used to be...

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

10 posted 2003-08-22 01:39 PM

You are brilliant, talented, and exquisite. Your words flow with such ease and grace

Crystal

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-08-22 01:42 PM

Fantastic write and a most enjoyable read!
Love ya lady!
~Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

12 posted 2003-08-22 02:30 PM

gathering my skirt to hip--
squatting crepe around my knees--
we laughed about the present tense
and then we hit the road.

Karen, although I am busy with the new pup, I had to pop in to get my "serenity-fix". Awesome and library bound. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
Emily Dickinson

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

13 posted 2003-08-22 03:20 PM

so much to take in here...i'm reading over
and over again!

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