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GhostWriter_6
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0 posted 2003-08-26 08:41 AM


??? KrEw LoVe ???

Moses parted the red sea to make an exit for his people
to take the dry route.. blood was thicker than water..
now many of my family has made the departure
confused by a war tactic...divide and conqueor
our family used to be tight and bounced back from bullshit like elastic
the dynasty falls due to over reaction and drastic dramatics
its gramatic how we can specify verbal linguistics
and fight over simple logistics
were all orphan children <-- cause my family is non existant
so close but yet so distant
think of the history... we displayed original styles...
we fit no predetermined profile
and we ran [edited] for a while
now were debris... <-- destroy, rebuild and recycle
how many times do we have to go thru this cycle
new beginnings with the same ending
I.S. has met its ending.. whos still [edited] pretending
our name was like a label
legendary like unicorns, pots of gold & fables
i laid all my cards face up on the table like poker
but once you fold and get out the game... its game over

[Edited by Administrator]

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-27-2003 08:38 AM).]

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Suede
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since 2003-08-25
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Drifting on the soul
1 posted 2003-08-26 09:10 AM


Oh my god, this was excellent. I could feel everthing transcribed. Such a delight to read, but pain to understand. Brilliant

As forever is always - Suede

[This message has been edited by Suede (08-26-2003 09:11 AM).]

GhostWriter_6
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2 posted 2003-08-26 09:16 AM


appreciated the feedback suede <-- did u knwo i love thattype of leather... smooth..... thanx for the feedback
Sunnyone
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3 posted 2003-08-27 11:07 PM


I think this needs to go back to the front so it will get the attention it deserves.  I especially liked LINE 5...this is a very descriptive piece...~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

angelblueyes
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4 posted 2003-08-27 11:14 PM


Very descriptive here and I enjoyed.
Crystal

Sunnyone
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5 posted 2003-08-28 10:38 AM


up again
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