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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Rendezvous Within the desperate weight of silk her skin is held down by bones holding the fabric of life to gown It folds and flows a feeling that translates air into a song that stills the moon that guides pale and considerate even as a daring breeze turns and lifts the cloth as if to tease the perfect curve and slant and mold the tension away from back with fingers pressed to artist’s task slow with grace the moon had lacked although it licked the dirt to golden crumbs the breeze the cool touch to skin has won Alight alone no longer she takes a step into the hold of shadow cut to fit the place beside the tree beneath the bend of light where in rendezvous with love the darkness waits |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah yes, there you go flapping silk in breezes again, but this time I saved it to my hard drive so I won't ask you a thousand times for its title  but the tension in this was almost too tight for comfort. A good hot tub and massage, yes? |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Alight alone no longer she takes a step into the hold of shadow cut to fit the place beside the tree beneath the bend of light where in rendezvous with love the darkness waits Absolutely wonderful writing, sweet lady.  I'm saving it, too. Hugs  Ethel |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Just awesome, dear Martie! Love, Margherita  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
beautiful and quite magical |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"the moon that guides pale and considerate even as a daring breeze turns and lifts the cloth " Ooh, perfect -- I love this...can just see it. This whole poem so clear, distinct, seeing things in new ways. Simply beautiful. ...and made me want to be peepin' over the fence....! Go, breeze! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Martie!! Ooooooh I love this one!! Keeping it for sure in my Martie file! ~Hugs YOU!~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I swear to God, I saw the phantasm of this spirit melt into that tree... where's my book?  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Continuously, no one does the word magic like you do~ How very tenderly you pen~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
wondrous, your poetry is a breath of fresh air...creative and most unique... |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
love your skribble sis, as always it dances across the page and leaves a soul in reminisce. Not to mention your grace of pen... dale |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Beautiful! There can be freedom and safety in the shadows; it just does not seem that way to most people. *smile* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You are unique and I love your poetry.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
slow with grace the moon had lacked although it licked the dirt to golden crumbs the breeze the cool touch to skin has won you always impress...and as always.. I am awed by the way you weave the phrase and image so tightly..the reader can see it ..but see it as they want or would... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
even as a daring breeze turns and lifts the cloth as if to tease the perfect curve and slant and mold the tension away from back with fingers pressed to artist’s task slow with grace the moon had lacked The moon may lack grace... your words never do. *S* I love the way you draw us away from whatever world confines our bodies... right to the there. *S* Excellent! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the moon that guides pale and considerate even as a daring breeze turns and lifts the cloth as if to tease the perfect curve and slant and mold the tension away from back with fingers pressed to artist’s task slow with grace the moon had lacked although it licked the dirt to golden crumbs the breeze the cool touch to skin has won =========================== good grief ... my muse needs a pair of Martie glasses... I swear you SEE poetry in everything... and that make us VERY lucky  Its been a million years since I touched you |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi all...thank you so much for the replies, and psssst, Janet Marie, there IS poetry in everything! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I had to come bad for another taste. God, where would I be if I couldn't read your poetry? I think my soul would wilt like flowers in the heat. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Magic and wonderful images and wow Martie - this is just great - Paul |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Simply beautiful...:-) The last stanza allows the reader to peak through the crack in the common world and into the place of shadows, from where always rises, in dim light, the rendesvous place of love...at least this is what my imagination tells me after reading this poem... Love to read your poetry....ice |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
WOW! What a delightful read! always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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