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Whirlpools ( A Senryu)
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Whirlpools ( A Senryu) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Reflection for the sun my smiling eyes seek solace in the shade |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Let me be the bearer of sunlight again......i am weary of the shade...... hello Suzie |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
 very nice smiling eyes.... |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I like this, Sue. You said a lot in few words.  Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Michele: gladly . . . me too thank you Rebel - thank you - so very sweet to me Ethel: thank you - this was difficult for me as I cannot say few in so little words. I am not happy with it at all It signifies that the sun only reflects off of my eyes - that they do not absorb Thanks guys xxoo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautiful poem of happiness, and on the lighter side, folks around here are turning into nocturnal beings...the sun has only been out 4 days in two months....dark, cloudy, rain rain rain...so thank you kindly for this sunshine in my pocket today. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Sue, this is beautiful, sweet friend, what a wonderful vision this is and it had me carried away too, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The use of alliteration gives the senryu a lyrical quality. When I look at your smiling eyes in your photo, I am pleased that you were not in the shade!  Warm hugs, Linda |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Well done . How 'bout sending some of that sun, heck I'd even take the shade, up this way. Torrential rains again ... 16 weekends in a row! grrr.... Soggy Hugs ... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
solace sounds nice..bump [This message has been edited by Aenimal (06-23-2003 12:09 AM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Great write. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
we get to see your pretty eyes every day m dear, and they do smile, so get em back outta the shade, where they belong. clever write lady, methinks i understand. |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
Very fine write! Blue eyes are more sensitive to the sun than brown. Mine always squint in bright sunlight. Shade is a blessing, especially when it's cast by one of those hugging, huggable trees! Blessings! Shirl 'Tiz feathers that make the bird - |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you everyone - was my first try at a senyru and not very good- these are hard to write - so little room to speak . . . Thanks for bumping it Raph - it would have just died Gem - I think you know too Thank you guys for reading this nonsense xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-24-2003 03:25 AM).] |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Shady lady......nice. thank you Goldenrose. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Phil . . . truly xxoo |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Nice Write little wing!  ARCTIC WIND |
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