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I don't like this, opinions plz?
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I don't like this, opinions plz? |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
Hate me Look at you Everything I want And nothing I could do Take me Show me where to climb Make me disappear Make yourself divine Everything I want But you know I can't have Make this part of me Never want to be Make it strangle me Make it soothen me Be my ectasy Be my part of me Dead eyes Killed by the light You led them to create This harmless illusion But then in changed around Broke me down Took away my moral Look where I stand Half of what I used to be And still not close No where close To what you need The pin is deep inside Breaking me apart Ripping out my insides Pricking out my skin When does this go away When does this feeling begin When do you show me When do you show me When does this feeling begin When inside no longer aches And I can be again. |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Could you explain it a little bit more? I think you have a good start to it. Good luck!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
pretty much looking around, not caring about anything, not letting other people's views on you effect you, although sometimes it aches inside you always push through it all |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Nice start indeed! ARCTIC WIND |
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