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Watch the weather, it’s going to storm [repost]
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Watch the weather, it’s going to storm [repost] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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They say that it is going to storm that we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever they say that it is going to howl but it won’t match the ravage in my heart they say its going to rain and pour but not like this tornado that has torn us far apart What was left within me, and what is left behind a worn and careless mess is all that’s left this time They say there is a tempest blowing my heart sure knows it to be true you can hear it in the old cock’s crowing as the skies get dark and lose the blue and that tornado, well it snuck in tight sucked me up and drew in the light ravaged and savaged and threw me around and then it as suddenly let me down What was left within me and what is left behind a worn and careless mess is all that’s left this time Now I keep a careful eye on those stormy days never will I again let it have its way for I will draw behind me that creaky cellar door and await the ceasing of its terrible vast roar they say that it is going to storm that we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever What was left within me and what is left behind a worn and careless mess is all that’s left this time |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
they say that it is going to storm that we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever nice lines,, and a nice write,,,, enjoyed,., A voice of honesty |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Now I keep a careful eye on those stormy days never will I again let it have its way for I will draw behind me that creaky cellar door and await the ceasing of its terrible vast roar they say that it is going to storm that we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever' I can't tell you how much I've missed reading this kind of poetry from you Kari. Glad I stopped in today.  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karilea, Now you know I am putting this one into my library!! Wonderful. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Indeed, K, I am shutting that cellar door tight. I have felt the rath of that tornado. Don't care for the experience. Patricia |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
as the skies get dark and lose the blue and that tornado, well it snuck in tight sucked me up and drew in the light I love the whole poem, but these lines are especially powerful. No tornado can switch off all the light that remains in you .... Love and hugs. Margherita |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now I keep a careful eye on those stormy days never will I again let it have its way for I will draw behind me that creaky cellar door and await the ceasing of its terrible vast roar they say that it is going to storm that we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever Karilea, those storms are really hard to get over sometimes, aren't they? They make us want to stay where we feel secure.....  Very good poem, Lady  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! good stuff! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"they say its going to rain and pour but not like this tornado that has torn us far apart" A perfect metaphor. I love storms. I have been known to stand out on a jetty in the ocean and play harmonica to a hurricane. Looking back on my life, it may be that I also am drawn to stormy relationships. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this entire poem was a marvelous read...simply profession from the first line to the last...and I don't mean to down play the sadness of it...it's just that from the most devestating storms come the finest parts of life....eventually...this was astounding...thank you for writing and sharing. |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I know his storm a huricane when I thought it was over I was only in the eye Excellent write from a most talented poet DQ [This message has been edited by dreambuilder (06-21-2003 05:04 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...Storms always make me feel alive...but I understand the meaning behind yours and why the need for the celler door. Beautifully written, dear friend! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write m'friend. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
You know, I usually love storms, but not this type of storm. I liked the poem though. Even though it's a repost, here's some  and a rainbow smile  for you!  ~Elizabeth P.S. This is a keeper. Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nice |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
They say that it is going to storm that we should watch the weather but never was the thunder born like the love that left me, ever they say that it is going to howl but it won’t match the ravage in my heart they say its going to rain and pour but not like this tornado that has torn us far apart............................................................................." Sweet Karilea!, this is a wonderful post, Emotions and feelings are represented. Nothing more painful then the feeling of ones broken heart.  to youARCTIC WIND |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You read between the lines, Sir... Well done! and thank you for dusting off an oldie.  |
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