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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-06-22 10:01 AM



Breadcrumb Senryu

Like sprinkled breadcrumbs
Senryus that feed our hearts
Join with creatures all

So we string soft words
To hang such from stars, to catch
Dreams that might arise

Reflect then with all
Those who watch a star’s pure shine
We are not alone

Sing sweet Senryus
Wrap kind words in soft haiku
Drop breadcrumbs, lightly

Draw all beasts along
That they may feed from our palms
Sharing in our dreams


© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-22 10:06 AM


very nice "K"  i liked the flow,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ


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2 posted 2003-06-22 10:06 AM


So very beautiful, dear Karilea. Yes a few words can bring such comfort and nourish our hungry hearts.
Love, Margherita

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3 posted 2003-06-22 10:08 AM


K,

Oh goodness, I love this!  Breadcrumbs, yes.  I just read a haiku before I came to your verse.  I was thinking of attempting a structured poem such as this, but then I always think I can't because I always have too much to say and can't say it with such few words.  Now, I shall think of this style as breadcrumbs to be dropped and feed others so that new thoughts are inspired.

Lovely, my friend.

Patricia

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4 posted 2003-06-22 10:17 AM


Good Morning Sunshine!  Can I get a bit of toast with those breadcrumbs????  
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5 posted 2003-06-22 10:28 AM



BRAVO!

You KNOW I love this one!

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6 posted 2003-06-22 10:45 AM


Senryu breadcrumbs
lead friends through woods to save us...
The witch? Loneliness.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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7 posted 2003-06-22 12:05 PM


Love this Karilea!! Wonderful. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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8 posted 2003-06-22 01:26 PM


Perfectly said Karilea~  I like to think we all give and take and feed on each others dreams.   Lovely thoughts.
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9 posted 2003-06-22 08:40 PM


Karilea, you know how much I love to write and read these 'little' poems that have such a HUGE impact.

Outstanding sweet lady ... hugs


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10 posted 2003-06-22 08:46 PM


Beautiful Karilea...these are wonderful!
~Hugs~

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11 posted 2003-06-23 10:29 AM


Wow! Five in a row!
Tells a full story, plus!
As Q expressed, I, too,
like the flow. There's
almost a melody with it!
A GOOD one!

Blessings!
Shirl

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Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

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12 posted 2003-06-23 01:47 PM


Karilea...These are so lovely...you up-lifted me.  Thank you...
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13 posted 2003-06-23 04:14 PM


This is awesome...!
Eric

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14 posted 2003-06-23 04:24 PM


Oh, this is soooo lovely!


~*~
As Sun spreads her light,
She illuminates our world
With her caring ways.
~*~

Love, Light & Sunshine,
Earth Angel

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15 posted 2003-06-23 04:26 PM


I'd forget my halo if it wasn't attached!

...now it's saved!

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16 posted 2003-06-23 04:37 PM


nice read
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17 posted 2003-06-23 05:50 PM


Ok,  let the band come out and play a
tune that will come close to the song
you sung in these little pieces of
superb poetry....

I dare say,  the band will lose!

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18 posted 2003-06-24 01:08 AM


"So we string soft words
To hang such from stars, to catch
Dreams that might arise"

lovely gentle thoughts
very much enjoyed

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19 posted 2003-06-24 01:31 AM


Karilea:

this is awesome
lol I had trouble doing one
xxoo

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20 posted 2003-06-24 03:49 AM


yes! i love this!
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21 posted 2003-06-24 09:33 AM


Nice, Kari. I like the breadcrumbs woven in with the stars.
Sandra

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22 posted 2008-08-13 01:59 PM


So we string soft words
To hang such from stars, to catch
Dreams that might arise
....................................."

Sweetest Karilea, this one shone above the others for me, Just my favorite part... *sigh**

to you
ARCTIC WIND

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23 posted 2008-08-13 09:42 PM


Thank you, m'friend. It's a pleasure to visit the past...




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