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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia 
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In the quarry of my ponder, where I chip away each day I pray to find what’s missing in my soul that slipped away With hope I dig for hours, just to reap no found reward But think of moments still to come, that I can dig toward There’s a mound a size so mighty, that’s more daunting than elate Afraid; I feel my efforts make no hole and search too late For rocks the size of boulders stand to block my shovels way The gold dust that I once had found, I’ve spent with every day Through granite I am picking, as my hands they start to bleed The treasure that allures, is the treasure that I need The broken edges open up the demons from within My quarries filled with ponder and a darkened side of sin But at it I just chip away and try with hope to find The piece of gold I’m longing for and time that treats me kind …………………………………………………………… My tomb of self is lonely, buried deep; so deep within I mine each day to only mark the places to begin If I succeed, I’ll share with voice, the words I dare not speak For light will fill the shadowed hell that made a mountain weak And I might find a piece of peace amongst the blood and tears Some gentleness and harmony to help me through the years ………………………………………………………………………………………………….. My ponder is a quarry, packed with inner thoughts that hide Within it, what went missing, which has left a void inside |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Rick, in all honesty I must say that a person who can write like this, cannot have a total void within them! These words came from someone who has a gift within! Loving hugs, Linda |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Rick, I love this..... especially this part..... My tomb of self is lonely, buried deep; so deep within I mine each day to only mark the places to begin If I succeed, I’ll share with voice, the words I dare not speak For light will fill the shadowed hell that made a mountain weak And I might find a piece of peace amongst the blood and tears Some gentleness and harmony to help me through the years Yes, peace and harmony is there...  Hugs  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-20-2003 10:13 AM).] |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Linda, thank you so much for your wonderful reply, you always seem to uplift my soul, your words here are treasured, again thank you. Ethel, great to see you here as well, thanks for this quick reply and comment, always so much appreciated, you all are truly a family of friends that help each other get through stuff. To you both, again thank you. Sincerely Rick |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Gosh Rick, this is a sad side of you, m'friend...you wear pain well...and I'm here to share it with you. We all have something missing, I think. It's part of being human.  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
rick...i think there are a few of us here that know what empty is...hugs to you...h [This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (06-21-2003 04:52 AM).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Someday your void will be filled,enjoyed your poem! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, was it just me, or was your meter spot on? Ok, so you've grown in your poetry, in your meter...in your thoughts... SHARE more... Wonderful write here, Rick. At first I wanted to change "quarry" to "query" and then of course, saw that you carried the theme straight through. It always pays to read a good poem twice.... Thank you!  |
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D'sWhisper Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 68Washington, USA |
Rick...this is Stunning! This flows amazingly keeping a steady, pace and beat teh entire way through. You discription was brilliant and the tone was so soft, mellow...wondering. I loved this. You are a poets, poet. ~DW~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
This was an astounding write of awareness from a gentle sensitive caring heart...wow...is all I can say...this is the first of yours I've read since a new member of PIP and I must say, simply...my pleasure to read. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi Dixie, nice to see you here my friend, through a little sadness comes much thought and inspiration, somehow I feel that there is a sadness there trying to get out and it tries through my pen of words. Thanks for sharing and being there. 1slick_lady, thank you for replying, very much appreciated, I believe we all know what emptyness contains to a degree and am also sure we all feel that something is missing, maybe not so often but at times. Hugs back to you and take care. A Romantic heart, thank you for your reply, maybe today will be the day, nice you could visit. My dear Sunshine, your replies always warm me through, thank you so much for this reply, the thoughts you express make my sun shine. I will share all I can, take care my friend. DW, to you as well my friend, thank you, your words fill my heart with joy, this family of friends is indeed kind and caring, wonderful to meet so many that are new to me. To you all, again thank you, all your words are greatly appreciated and heart felt, may you all be well and take care. Sincerely Rick |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
LeeJ, here you have paid me wonderful comments, which I find very rewarding, thank you, I hope I can give you more pleasure through words over time, great you could share you thoughts with me here, so very greatly appreciated. Take care my friend. Nice to meet you here. Sincerely Rick |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
You know, I haven't seen much in open poetry 42-43 from you, so i decided I would like to read one I haven't read on an older poem! Indeed it was good!  ARCTIC WIND |
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