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A Reply To A Modest Man
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A Reply To A Modest Man |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla 
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try as you will try as you must try always to make a big fuss dear sweet love of mine ill love you all through time,do not try to be who you are not,For its who you are that i feel in love with. on that cold winter day you my dear are the one that melts all my worries away. For you make me happier then i could ever be,its only with you that i want to be Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... [This message has been edited by Foxyoasis (06-19-2003 10:32 PM).] |
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pisumnux Junior Member
since 2003-06-11
Posts 49Troy, NY |
your boyfriend is a very lucky man...   "There are three things men can do with women: love them, suffer for them, or turn them into literature." |
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Canon_D_111 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 58New York USA |
great feeling....may I make a suggestion "you my dear is the one" is should be "are" other then this I enjoyed your poem |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nice effort. As a suggestion, it would be good to see if you can also work outside of the sentence format  [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-19-2003 10:30 PM).] |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
setence format? please elborate thanks.. Pisumnux,You know I am the lucky 1 here,not you Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed the write ARCTIC WIND |
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