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Heaven and Hell
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Heaven and Hell |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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As you drift towards the floor in a state of blissful calm you think to yourself This is what heaven must feel like Until you wake up staring at the ceiling clutching the ribs you've broken on the toilet and remember I'm still in hell |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I LOVED this what a great write raph hope you had one of those alerts "I've fallen & I cant get up" & no hangover - lol as a gimp with bad luck & a hard life I could relate to this in sooo many ways write on awesome friend & poet . . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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Laqe Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 72Michigan, US |
LMAO! I love this. Maybe it wasn't meant to be humorous, but I definitely took it that way. Thank you for some comic relief! .Echo. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Dream the beauty of it was while I felt pain I was so far wasted I didn't realize how bad the pain was or that they were broken until hours later lol That's what i get for escapism Laqe it was meant to be funny at my expnse of course |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 you know what I think,eh??If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yes a few moments of pleasure..........then comes the thud...where is that golden ticket already?( |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
lol Kris Mish the ticket may have gone down the toilet when i awoke my arm was bent awkwardly inside and the last thing i remembered was hearing a flush on the way down.. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I awoke one time, hundreds of miles from home, with a cranky conductor explaining to me that I had to get off the train because I had gone as far as was allowed by the ticket some "friends" had purchased. Whatever does not kill us makes us stronger. *smile* I hope you heal well. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ice you can always depend on friends cant you lol oh and i have healed this happened last summer |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
I got a name for this as well..... "PRAYING TO THE PORCELINE GOD!" Jeez....I could never hold a good drink! I still can't hold a good drink, I'm just old enough to realize it now...haha! Great write! TIma C. If you cant get rid of the skeletons in your closet, you'd best teach them how to dance. George Bernard Shaw |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Timc it wasn't praying to the porcelain god..or a technicolor lunch..i just came into the bathroom to splash some cold water on my face and next thing i knew i was on the floor..not from drink btw.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hehehehehe...oh gawd! this is too good! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok I'll fess up . . . do these words sound familar to anyone: "turn left . . .click flash snap turn right . . . click flash snap straight ahead . . . " (I am so kidding . . . .) Raph - you know I think this is hilarious only because I can hear you going: WTF? lmao xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-17-2003 04:54 AM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
he heeeee. i'm acyually pretty drunk at the mo, been celebrating today, last exam. yay, finally a poem for one of your much loved escapades. yer daft thing. reminmded me of myself, and the toilet lid falling on me nose. aaargh, cant see straigt! love gem xxx |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is good...yes... Excellent one Raph...in your classis style. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 won't miss THAT.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Dixie thanks grins Sue yeah sounds like the xray lady who decided to take an xray of my upper chest even as I was grabbing my ribs Gem congrats on the exams i trust they went well? And the toilet seat story is still one of the best I've heard lol Thanks Barry what is my style exactly? Insanity? yes grins K not exactly the highlight of my life no |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
lol Raph - it does . . . I was referring to those pretty pictures you get when you get in trouble lmao grabbing your ribs . . . sorry its still funny . . . [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-18-2003 12:30 PM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh I've been in that kinda hell too many a time but not for a long time.... getting older and all.  enjoyed Sir Raph. Maree  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Raffaele this is so eloquent in its essentiality .... should hang on the wall of certain places! Sono felice che tu sia guarito. Tu hai sempre messaggi importanti. Bravo. Abbracci. Margherita |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue I know you were just sidestepped it..grin Maree good for you ...wisdom..ah wisdom Grazie Margherita lo messagio e : "se deve essere stonato stai attenti per i toileti" ..grins |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
damn bro.... float down into heaven stare up into hell yer upside down? hangman |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
lmao Bri..pretty much sums it up..a topsey turvy world no? |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
you have a way with images...that speak many many words |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Liked the thoughts! ARCTIC WIND |
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