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Slickcme2
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since 2003-06-18
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0 posted 2003-06-18 11:10 PM


Asleep




As my eyes close,
I venture into another world.
A world of mysteries.
A world of the unknown.
But soon I drift to silence,
And lay motionless.
Silent.
In time, the sun rises,
From its own dreams and feelings.
And my eyelids open
To wander back into reality.


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Forgotenandgone
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NC
1 posted 2003-06-18 11:14 PM


I like the twist and also the line about the suns own dreams....Good work
the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
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Jacksonville, Florida, USA
2 posted 2003-06-18 11:14 PM


Welcome to Passions!!! I really enjoyed this poem. Loved the imagery.

Cold hands means a warm heart

skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars
3 posted 2003-06-18 11:15 PM


Welcome! Nice thoughts about sleep and dreams. I'll look forward to reading more from you!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2003-06-18 11:17 PM


Slick:

Welcome to PIP!  
Nice entrance
You make sleep sound so peaceful
and even the break of day
doesnt seem so bad
through your words

I see this in two ways:
the gratefullness of a new day
and the dreading of it

Nice write  
Please check your email for a special
greeting from everyone here at Passions
xxoo

Slickcme2
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since 2003-06-18
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5 posted 2003-06-19 12:30 PM


no one else?

sniffle sniffle
haha

littlewing
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New York
6 posted 2003-06-19 12:31 PM


Slick:

its early yet - trust me
go to sleep and when you wake
you'll be smiling . . .
xxoo

Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2003-06-19 12:43 PM


Welcome! think I'll be ready to fall asleep after this and another sleep poem
enjoy, and hope you like the variety here at Passions.

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
8 posted 2003-06-19 04:20 AM


welcome to the passion...and with a name like that...you ARE seen...h
D'sWhisper
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since 2003-06-16
Posts 68
Washington, USA
9 posted 2003-06-19 04:30 AM


Beautiful line! Very original! This does indeed make sleep feel as if it calling. Great work.  <>DW<>
Mistletoe Angel
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10 posted 2003-06-19 10:03 AM




(big hugggssssssssss) Awwwwwwwww, this is a gorgeous debut, sweet friend, I love to dream ever so much and is my favorite part of the day other than playing, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (06-19-2003 10:04 AM).]

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
11 posted 2003-06-19 10:20 AM


Welcome to Passions!  You're going to be quite comfortable in your new Poet's home...

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-06-19 10:25 AM


In time, the sun rises,
From its own dreams and feelings.
And my eyelids open
To wander back into reality.


Well, you have made a very big entrance with your fine poem. I hope to read more of your work. And
Wecome to Passions  
Ethel....garysgirl  



Slickcme2
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since 2003-06-18
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13 posted 2003-06-19 10:33 PM


Just getting it back to the top
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
14 posted 2008-02-25 06:46 PM


I'm tired now

thank you for the good Write!

ARCTIC WIND

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