Open Poetry #27 |
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Asleep poem |
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Slickcme2 Junior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 11 |
Asleep As my eyes close, I venture into another world. A world of mysteries. A world of the unknown. But soon I drift to silence, And lay motionless. Silent. In time, the sun rises, From its own dreams and feelings. And my eyelids open To wander back into reality. |
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Forgotenandgone Member
since 2003-05-07
Posts 52NC |
I like the twist and also the line about the suns own dreams....Good work |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Welcome to Passions!!! I really enjoyed this poem. Loved the imagery. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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skyshine![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Welcome! Nice thoughts about sleep and dreams. I'll look forward to reading more from you! ![]() ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Slick: Welcome to PIP! Nice entrance You make sleep sound so peaceful and even the break of day doesnt seem so bad through your words I see this in two ways: the gratefullness of a new day and the dreading of it Nice write Please check your email for a special greeting from everyone here at Passions xxoo |
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Slickcme2 Junior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 11 |
no one else? sniffle sniffle haha |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Slick: its early yet - trust me go to sleep and when you wake you'll be smiling . . . xxoo |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome! think I'll be ready to fall asleep after this and another sleep poem ![]() |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome to the passion...and with a name like that...you ARE seen...h |
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D'sWhisper Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 68Washington, USA |
Beautiful line! Very original! This does indeed make sleep feel as if it calling. Great work. <>DW<> |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (big hugggssssssssss) Awwwwwwwww, this is a gorgeous debut, sweet friend, I love to dream ever so much and is my favorite part of the day other than playing, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! ![]() ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (06-19-2003 10:04 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! You're going to be quite comfortable in your new Poet's home... Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
In time, the sun rises, From its own dreams and feelings. And my eyelids open To wander back into reality. Well, you have made a very big entrance with your fine poem. I hope to read more of your work. And Wecome to Passions ![]() Ethel....garysgirl ![]() |
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Slickcme2 Junior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 11 |
Just getting it back to the top ![]() |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I'm tired now thank you for the good Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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