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Nightmare #1 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The mist was clinging to the ground and dawn played patterns through the leaves, I could smell the musk of earth. The path was smooth beneath my feet. A forest was awakening. Then I heard the green fly buzz. The kind of flies that court the dead-- I smelled the stench and knew it was... My chest became a sheet of ice It grew difficult to breathe. Then the moss reached out to me and latched upon my panicked feet tendrilling about my legs and upon my fear it fed-- then I tripped discovery and spied the eyes in severed head-- I saw it was my own. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
YIKES!!!! Gosh Ser. this certainly is a nightmarish tale....It is a tale, right? Wow. the visuals were intense... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Whew! I'm glad I read this hours before my bedtime or I'd never get to sleep! Scary one Missy!  |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Positively, deliciously...morbid. Reads like a blend of Poe and Dickinson. Love it. Good job. CG |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You got me with this one honey. Excellent as always. keeping it. Maree  |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
"then I tripped discovery" The chilling Blaize at work . . .  and now we all look forward to more morbidity from thee . . . |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, this is scary...I hope it was just fantasy and not reality!! Very good writing!!   Ethel |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen...this is quite a powerful and disturbing nightmare. My wish for you?...a night of peaceful sleep, with the only dreams being those that bring a smile to your face. Love you, lady, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (06-19-2003 07:32 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you, in certain native american ideology, it is believed that in order to quell a recurring nightmare, one must act it out--else be doomed to repeat the same in "dreamtime." smile. Obviously, I can't act this one out. (I HOPE...  )But I thought writing it was the next best thing. Thanks for indulging me... Love you all.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Okay, see I read #2 then #1 thinking this one would be lighter, WRONG! I am leaving my light on tonight thanks to you. And lady, I would definitely have warm milk before bed and stop these - they are dang scary, and more importantly my heart goes out to you. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (06-19-2003 08:15 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
jesus K |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
...shaking in my boots |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Woah... you're still my hero (strangely enough this made me thing of Lord of the Flies...). *runs off to read the rest of the nightmares* |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity, Dark and delicious. Doc |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
you discovered something dead in you... shiver...smile love your atmosphere |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Good lord, these 3, put an actual fear in my bones... bumping all Susan |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
The mist was clinging to the ground and dawn played patterns through the leaves, I could smell the musk of earth. The path was smooth beneath my feet...................." Excellent! ~  ARCTIC WIND |
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