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"caution ye, who enter here"
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"caution ye, who enter here" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I've been told that my words at times are hard to understand-- tonight I'm not in search of grace tonight I write the reprimand of myself (whom I know not) I never really had a plan take this pen and bless the strokes that sever neck down to the bone and write my head upon the stick and place it on the path to warn: "Caution, ye who enter here." I'd like to say now. It is true. The antichrist does dwell in you. The writhing junkie is for real-- the mirror does become surreal showing yellow eyes that beg for life--while skin, wishes you dead. The beast is in the temple now, invited there by you, the priest. "box the shadow" pray for bells announcing rest from the last round. Seven trumpets sounded loud while you doped yourself to deaf Down is up, and up is down, and if you live? You ain't done yet. Time to go re-trace the steps, backwards--to the future--go-- falling through the looking glass, embracing hell to have a home, So what if it IS brimstone? For one moment you've been warmed. I understand, the fog does ease the pain from that you seek release. I understand the need for peace, but like the silence that precedes the stealth of demons in attack-- the danger lies in placate calm-- poppies will put you to sleep... but battle will begin at dawn. There you find the armies led by dualities of self. The strengths of you are now imbued in the antichrist of truth. There are lies and there is truth, and the day that you must choose? There it is you'll find my head. "Caution, ye who enter here" |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
That was interesting...I'll have to save this and give it another read, because honestly I didn't understand all of it, but it did give me something to think about. Thanks!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is very interesting but liked Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Chris- Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 52 |
riveting, ya just riveting, brutally honest and powerful great great read, i love the first stanza the whole thing leading up to when you finally said the head being cut the neck being severed was just yours and was being mounted near bridges and gates like in the middle ages, surprising and wonderful, dark yes but definitely wonderful |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
why Blaze -- you are a caution....  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, K....you are amazing, Lady!!!!  Goodnight...  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
warning signs?? moths dont heed warnings and cautions. Your mind is full of rhymes divine and I'd walk there barefoot any ole time  Im still imagining your voice ... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
poppies will put you to sleep... but battle will begin at dawn. Yes, you may numb the pain, but it returns again bolder than ever. No truth to be found in this state. With a clear mind, the truth you shall find. I think I got it! You are making me ponder my interpretation. Patricia |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hey girl...since when does it matter if anyone else understands? Soemtimes the words come and even you don't understand. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
poppies will put you to sleep... but battle will begin at dawn. yep.... shows not all flowers are to be picked..some should be left alone.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - you write deep within, always I believe do I understand your words... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Thanks for the warning! But, that of course just peaked a reader's interest--as you knew it would! LOL So, I read it!---and I repeat, "Thanks for the warning!"  Brill as usual! Warm hugs, EA |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
What can one say about your words? It's hard to think of a novel response, when I sit in awe of a work that reaches out and grabs me. Always, dear poetess, your verse does not allow for a passive read. One must always interactively peruse the lines that burst forth from your pen. Another excellent piece!  [This message has been edited by WhiteRose (06-12-2003 10:43 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for reading. and if this one sounds rather familiar it's because I've written this same thought a million times. Every time, thinking I'm done with it too. And I'll not explain it, because I know it can mean different things to others, and there is no wrong answer in interpretation. I just hope this is the last time I feel a need to write this one. I am SO hard-headed...sigh. Thank you all for being so kind. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Excellent and meaningful... Susan |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I think it may BE the last but if it isnt.... then we get to read...... the sheer honesty the purple words the music of amazing perception that is YOU you always open me but I would gladly share your pain --the pain of being human-- with you always smile and a hug |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Well done, indeed. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Damn K, maybe my head will keep you company we'll set them at opposite ends of the doorway |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"The beast is in the temple now, invited there by you, the priest." Yes? And? Did the lovely creature bring me poppies? *grin* ...when the evening's rain has washed away the stains of sorrow say, "Hello!" to brother Crow, as he greats you on the morrow, when you venture out to play... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K: no need to explain yourself especially not here This write? (if I could swear I would) is amazing brilliant and I do know that lure you so speak of Nice metaphor with the antichrist indeed you are so elusive yet a slap in the face you know? xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool stuff! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very Well done Indeed! ARCTIC WIND |
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