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Soul'ar Eclipse - Sonnet
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Soul'ar Eclipse - Sonnet |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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~*Soul'ar Eclipse*~ She stands in open view, yet seen by none While praying one will notice soul's eclipse Though most feel only calm of warming sun Within her heart, the storm would capsize ships None look, with naked eyes, upon her grief For fear they may be captured in its wake A few may offer shoulder of relief Yet no one sees her spirit slowly break Beyond her guise of 'happy and content' She slowly drowns with falling of each tear And though no sound she utters of lament Her heart pleads silently for one to hear She stands in open view, yet seen by none And prays someone will look beyond the sun ~vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (06-18-2003 12:41 AM).] |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
aww that is so sad  but a good writeFool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Simply put? One of your best vicky! Haunting, m'friend. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And though no sound she utters of lament Her heart pleads silently for one to hear She stands in open view, yet seen by none And prays someone will look beyond the sun =========================== thy rhymes are divine... such a bittersweet beauty you have penned... the moth is a sucker for sonnets and I am envious for my mothmind just cant find the discipline to do these. So good to see you back in the blue poetess Vicky-girl  No matter what the differences |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Envious! I'll do sonnets one day. s.a.g. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
heart moving but excellent penned! (((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gorgeous sad write! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is indeed one of your best - Remember - even throughout the eclipse - The sun shines brilliantly behind the scenes...  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Vicki: this is amazing! Oh you have been peeking into my heart now havent you? None look, with naked eyes, upon her grief For fear they may be captured in its wake A few may offer shoulder of relief Yet no one sees her spirit slowly break xxoo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vlraynes One of your best, excellent. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful sonnet Vicky! Very much enjoyed the read. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You saw my comments in PW... they go here, too! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ Lil' buddy ... this is perfect ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky....So beautifully done...so sad.  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A very worthy work Vicky. yes, as Nan said, shining brightly behind the eclipse. Nice sonnet, I enjoy an occasional write of one myself. They are a good challenge to the mind... You have done well. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I know of the storm which could capsize ships...of mine, and of yours... You write this well my friend.. lv,g "If you suppress laughter, it goes down and spreads out your hips."- Steve Allen |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Vicky, this sounds so very sad, dearest friend, the cycle is inevitable and every one who waits and dreams will find the moon shine upon them and make them the belle of the ball at some time! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Aw Mum.....  |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
holy... just... wow. *hugs* Kielo Everything we do in life we do for a first time and a last. We usually remember the first, but rarely suspect the latter. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautifully Penned ARCTIC WIND |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I've made a couple of attempts at sonnets but they don't compare to this one Beautifully done.Dee |
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