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Tempered Glass
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Tempered Glass |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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If I could measure you in glass and place your double in a frame so that I could slide away and open up the pane. To feel the breeze upon my cheek when summer days grow longer and the night becomes too warm kept stirring in my sleep. If I could temper you in glass without shattering all my dreams I'd roll the shade back in the sky and swim up to your ocean. If I could measure you in glass I would tint it from all sides and watch the shadows disappear as the darkness blinds my eyes. ~*~ I hate to say what inspires me, I mean really, the guy just came to measure my window for God sake. (doesn't that just ruin it)  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You are too funny... well at least you are inspired. I wish I had someone coming here to measure...anything. hugs M * hey that gives me an idea...what a way to meet someone huh? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...inspiration can be found anywhere...thanks for providing the inspire information...made me smile.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Inspiration comes where it comes....and takes us where it goes.... I'll be anxiously awaiting the poem that attends the INSTALLATION.....! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, your muse is so funny! I really enjoyed this tinted view of you.  |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
You made me laugh at the end of your poem but I so know what you mean! This poem is awesome!!! It is! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
grins wherever it may come from it produced another great write |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, LMFO That was excellent. I don't care how it was inspired. Well maybe a little.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
I hate to say what inspires me, I mean really, the guy just came to measure my window for God sake. (doesn't that just ruin it) no, it make me think im not the only mad housewife undressing deliverymen with my eyes |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
WAIT just a minute...you guys are too funny! I wasn't measuring HIM up, but he did fill the space quite nicely. Oh and about the installation ratleader, I haven't even got a price yet, so lets not go there. I can only afford so much, she works hard for the money ya know. Then again it's my window we're talking about, and I wouldn't want to miss anything good. Anyway, thanks for reading, now if he works a deal with me we'll be in business! Oh nevermind~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Har..... I ' l l b e w a i t i n g . . . . ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
No. Your explanation does not ruin it. "If I could measure you in glass I would tint it from all sides and watch the shadows disappear as the darkness blinds my eyes." That says it all. |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
Hmmm...i'm kinda handy around the house, might even work for free! (i don't do windows though)  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, I don't care where your inspiration came from, either....I loved this part, especially... To feel the breeze upon my cheek when summer days grow longer and the night becomes too warm kept stirring in my sleep. (Psssttt!! Your inspire was cute, though..) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 nice...lol |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Naw, didn't ruin it. Made it even better from a poet's point of view. I enjpyed. The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
I think I'm in the wrong business! If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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D'sWhisper Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 68Washington, USA |
Beautiful!!! I have to say I had a totally different picture in my mind before I read the inspiration behind the words. hehehe...but the second vision was wonderful too <>D'sWhisper<> |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lol.. nicely done blues... nicely done indeed.. no matter what or whom the inspiration. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
It's wonderful something as simple as a window can inspire you. (Or was the installer really that good looking without his shirt on?)....Nice write sweetie... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I could temper you in glass without shattering all my dreams I'd roll the shade back in the sky and swim up to your ocean. If I could measure you in glass I would tint it from all sides and watch the shadows disappear as the darkness blinds my eyes. =============================== lovely lovely imagery, word play and personification poetess Blue... I had to giggle at your explain of inspire.. make me wonder what youd write about if the pizza boy was cute LOL No matter what the differences |
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pisumnux Junior Member
since 2003-06-11
Posts 49Troy, NY |
Now THAT is an inspiration for a nice poem. "There are three things men can do with women: love them, suffer for them, or turn them into literature." |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"If I could temper you in glass without shattering all my dreams I'd roll the shade back in the sky and swim up to your ocean." it doesn't matter to me how you got it.....cause when you get it..it's goooood I loved this part |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nice write,, A voice of honesty |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
LOL..I just love this one...and no, the note at the end does not ruin it - it enhances it. We all know that an inspiration can come at any time, anywhere; by anything, or by anybody. It's the creation that really matters. Having said that, I hear that there is a shortage of window installers in the area. ...could be a window of...err...opportunity... CG |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hello, I'm new and browseing through an array of excellent poetry. My name is Lee J. and it was a pleasure reading, brought a smile, one never can tell what tomorrow brings...ehhh hem, I mean...what inspires us? hehehehhe, very much enjoyed. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
He must have been some __ muffin I think, yes? I have this picture in my mind now and forgotten all about your absolutely fabulous poem. Check your email Lori - see what you inspired LOL. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Lori, I loved this one. And don't worry, I was once inspired by a guy in a petrol station! Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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