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The Clearing (Witchsong--Part III)
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The Clearing (Witchsong--Part III) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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a ballet in my bones even in my awkward toes Grace-- a tilting of one wing wobbled flight pinfeathering-- this brown wren can fly. deny the sky in beckoning the bright of Him so cradling arms in span and loving wise begging me to sing again-- applauding this bedraggled child? in the meadow grasses tall spears of yellow turning green-- technicolor healing glee this time mother welcomed me-- This time there was no wailing wall. dragonfly of lavender sparkles dervished in my eyes spiral mystic from the sky reminding me of Gatherers-- I wanted them to see this too. and bundled them in circling around the trunks of fallen oaks. I twined the herbs of borrowed time blessed them, "make ye heady smoke" Praying friends would find the way-- for I cannot feast alone. of the huge uprooted oak, the other stood there skeletal split in two by lightning dark wood splintered in accuse: "You rest upon a sister's grave." Shamed by this admonishment I sat cross-legged on the ground, and there I prayed until I dozed-- dreaming I was wren in flight. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-01-2003 09:59 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"Grace-- a ballet in my bones even in my awkward toes Grace-- a tilting of one wing wobbled flight pinfeathering-- this brown wren can fly." and this... "Butterflies and bumblebees dragonfly of lavender sparkles dervished in my eyes spiral mystic from the sky reminding me of Gatherers-- I wanted them to see this too. So I picked up branch and twig and bundled them in circling around the trunks of fallen oaks. I twined the herbs of borrowed time blessed them, "make ye heady smoke" Praying friends would find the way-- for I cannot feast alone. I sat in wait upon the trunk of the huge uprooted oak, the other stood there skeletal split in two by lightning dark wood splintered in accuse: "You rest upon a sister's grave." Shamed by this admonishment I sat cross-legged on the ground, and there I prayed until I dozed-- dreaming I was wren in flight." YES...and you ARE flying...and beautifully!  You're on a roll today, and I'm loving every minute of it... every word...every image...every step of the dance... YOU are magical...  Love you, lady.  "My friends are my estate." ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (08-01-2003 10:05 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . you can stop dreaming . . . You know this is a short story, dont you? Released each on its own so the palate can savor each intent, every feel every movement . . . This is calming and smoke travels far indeed . . . xxoo |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
all three are gorgeous. the mixture of fantastical imagery with sprinklings of modern thought is great. -majnu |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Slipping all three into my library... Lady...you are amazing! Talk about talent!! Thank you for these! *Smiling at you, Nancy* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a wonderful read Karen... You have such a winsome spirit in your style...it breathes its own life. TD |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
and now-- my favorite this is you, Karen your trinity each containing a part of you different but equaling a whole you are amazing, love |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen...I'm still in awe and speechless..... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Spectacular trio, K! Kraw' |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now this is the real you coming out in full force here, and I can't even pick one single line that is better than the other, for they all make the "whole" and can not be separated. All I have to say is girl you need to get yourself published, so I can have them all in one place to read over and over. This is a classic, and I am saving, printing, and treasuring this one. I do believe this is my absolute favorite now. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Butterflies and bumblebees dragonfly of lavender sparkles dervished in my eyes spiral mystic from the sky reminding me of Gatherers-- I wanted them to see this too. Karen, this has been the most beautiful and exciting tale. I am so grateful that you took the time to write these in response to my pleading...lol. What precious keepers these three are!! luv ya! Chris |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wanted to thank everybody for the generous comments, your enouragement keeps me going and means the world to me. And? I almost hesitate to mention this, but I'm not sure if this story is over or not...but for now, today, this will have to do. Thanks for reading. I love you all.  |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Actually I am not sure how I stumbled onto this one but I am glad that I did. It was wonderfull. adagio |
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