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Patience (For Karen and Vicky)
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Patience (For Karen and Vicky) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Hands mill moist dirt to quench deep hurt, From the seams and the reams; I plant new seed to replace each bleed Of many a midnight dream. From wings I have shaken thoughts that have taken A bite of fresh sprung leaf, Hands dig deep soil not a bother, nor toil, As the sun shines sweet relief. I weed the roots of bulbs and shoots, And prepare the land down under, And await cool rain to dispel disdain, As the sky, she cries with thunder. I sleep slight wink of eyes which blink, 'Tis my pillow adorned with fear; Restless eve repeats until a new day greets A seedling to appear. A blooming sunflower in my garden bower I reap what I have sown, For thy restless night and worrisome plight, Gave birth to a golden throne. Now the noonday sun, thy work be done, As twilight doth begin; And to sacred flower, growing taller each hour, I retreat to dreams again. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damn! I have to go to work right now...I'll be back to this. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
It seems the flowers in your garden help you heal! Lovely to read.  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sue, you are one fine poetess! You are a remarkable writer!  I'm not just saying this, I am going back to read your illustrious words again! Loveya! Linda |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
See! I told you that I was going to read it again!--and yep, I deem it a  !!!I do believe that this may be my favorite poem of yours!  Linda |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, you are very talented, you know? This is a very beautiful poem. I was going to highlight a part, but I loved it all so much that I couldn't pick out a favorite. I love the way you are rhyming through the whole poem. It is so pretty, I'm going to keep it, too. Hope you don't mind?  Hugs Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed - thought you may like this . . . Shara - they certainly do thank you Linda - you are an angel! So sweet - God, thank you so much Ethel - of course I dont mind, I am honored this was a part of my challenge Vicky gave me PATIENCE to write of! The first one I used alliteration, imagery, internal rhyme, personification and simile all at once. Thank you so much I like trying different forms xxoo /pip/Forum7/HTML/000573.html [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-30-2003 10:35 AM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I'm in agreement about this being the best work of yours that I've read thus far. Your use of language and symbolism is nothing short of professional, and the fascinating use of rhyme really drew my attention in and held my interest to the very end. This is poetry at its finest. quote: Those lines gave me a real smile. You've got quite the imagination, my girl...  Brian Faith is a fine invention When gentlemen can see But microscopes are prudent In an emergency. ~~~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (07-30-2003 01:08 PM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very deep, and the best one I've read from you yet...of course they are all excellent and they all touch my heart |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brian, you are much too sweet to me and for me to write something to go into your library makes me smile . . . I look to you for guidance so often, I am glad you enjoyed it thank you *smile* xxoo Dix, this one just popped out today, it is all Vicky and Karen's fault, and I thank you for such uplifting words for me thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have to say as well that is by far the best of your work to date, and that is saying a lot  Great work!I don't want to know where I am going, it will ruin my journey. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
A blooming sunflower in my garden bower I reap what I have sown, For thy restless night and worrisome plight, Gave birth to a golden throne. Now the noonday sun, thy work be done, As twilight doth begin; And to sacred flower, growing taller each hour, I retreat to dreams again. and when i scatter between them, i know i will be home again...... this is so so good, sue, and it speaks volumes to me right now |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
could be your best..just one question..could you tell me what is patience? Oh nevermind i'll look it up myself I'm in a hurry |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sharon - Good God thank you so much . . . I am humbled Michele - I knew it would, I just knew it would thank you Raph - like I know what patience is? ahahahah . . . that was a good one up there OK the only way I could describe it was waiting for a flower to bloom . . . lets see the actual definition goes: (Merriam- Webster) 1. bearing pain or trials calmly HA 2. not hasty AHA 3. steadfast despite adversity AHAHA (Sue's definition) 1. sitting red-faced with boiling anger 2. veins popping out of forehead 3. being calm all day then flipping out and visiting your local liquor store and thank you, it does mean a lot to me xxoo All of you have made me smile so much today! Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-30-2003 02:44 PM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Yep, think it may well be your best. just had that serene beauty again, that you write so well. calming like a lullaby. sigh. beyooooooootiful. Susie, ya know where this is going.... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
oh my.... Sue... take a bow this is amazing just amazing beatiful, you |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I don't often tread here in Open, but LP directed me towards this...and I'm very glad he did. I was really taken by this poem, Sue...and every time I read it, I see more, so I keep reading it and reading it and...yeah. Think I'm going to do more of that. Thanks for the renewal.  ~Carly "How inimitably graceful children are in general before they learn to dance!" |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I will never tire reading you littlewing... jwesley |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do believe, I know I feel the importance of a challenge... and a belief. THIS...so well done...so well wrung... and so well writ. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I agree, you are reaching new heights in your work Sue. But you are just amazing that way--always a delightful surprise. Gleeful hugs!  and speaking of patience, I have to go BE one tomorrow, but I'll be back around. and with that, I'll tell you one of my famous corny jokes: A guy goes into to see the doctor, saying: "Doctor, doctor, you have to help me! I think I'm shrinking!" The Doc replies with a shrug, "Well, you're just going to have to be a little patient." GROAN...  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
yeah, WAITER! I'lluh have what the lady's havin'...and get her another, will ya? Damn Susie, yer onto something! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@Serenity! Seriously Sue..you have reached new heights with this piece.. THIS is amazingly beautiful...perfection!! A keeper for my library! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is absolutely wonderful.One of your best yet.I always enjoy your writes, but this one is going in the library. angelblueyes |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gem - to the trash bin? LOL I am kidding - God thank you so much . . . Ilike to try different writes - you are much too sweet to me Bri - you are so sweet *bowing* for once thank you for making me smile always Carly, coming from you and the fact that Brian sent you means a lot to me as the both of you are brilliant writers. Thank you for reading and I am truly honored Thank you Brian jwelesy - I sure hope so . . . heheh thank you for your kind words Hey Karilea - we are learning a lot these days huh? Mann , thank you so much Ilike that: so well writ lol xxoo K - thank you - you know you made me do this - or was it Vicky? Either way one of you are in trouble and goodluck with your visit . . . hands clasped for you thank you Karen - truly xxoo Ed - I am having a bout of challenges and I just cannot say no! Is a good thing, stretches my brain . . . to new things Thank you and umm btw - if your ordering - get another round please? Thank you Nancy - thank you so much, I sure hope so - I do try . . . angel- thank you so much - from one wing to another . . . too sweet to me Thanks guys xxoo |
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