Open Poetry #27 |
Sink Right In |
Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
The mistake I knew I was making. Dodge a closed hand, the same that had given me flowers. Do you mean what you say when you're angry? Do those harsh comments make you feel better? Black eye, bruised rib, crackling chew of my own teeth. Somehow, this I knew is the real you.. Your point plays pressure my neck caves, echo.. Your tongue finds home in my mouth, so that I can't speak of my disgust. Do you mean what you say when you're angry? Do those words really hold that much meaning to you? Grabbing pieces of your worthless skin, I'll let my opinion sink right in.. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Oh my, get out of that relationship or friendship if this is your reward for love and compassion; where there is no discussion...brute force has an easier access. Enjoyed the graphic description of the events [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-29-2003 01:57 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have been there and glad I left long ago |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow....powerfuly expressed. Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oh my oh my how love is blind...his words tore a hole in my heart...his anger left me in shreds...his distrust for himself, distrusted others....his accusations left a storm of meaning behind....one we should have seen in the beginning....but love is blind. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Grabbing pieces of your worthless skin, I'll let my opinion sink right in.. Poweful words as always. Stay strong M. hugs. gem xx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Broke my heart. Your writing reminds me of David Usher's early writing with Moist. Stark, honest but beautiful parts of Kill for you came to grind me into stone polishing the angled flesh and bone the smallest cut to drain my soul precious words of comfort swallowed whole ..you tore the makeup from my face with every acid word you ever knew now every line and crack exposed exploited fully till each scar shone through ..you came to grind me into stone polishing the angled flesh and bone the smallest cut to drain my soul precious words of comfort swallowed whole oh no she said i tried for love and i'd die for love but i'd kill for you i want i want i wanted to... strip me from the top down rip me from the raw into this higher place don't want to die |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
You sure do know how to express with word...This was brilliant... Susan C. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write n read,, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kaoru - a powerful write indeed sink those teeth write into the pages xxoo |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
my skin will heal my heart never will |
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