Open Poetry #27 |
Crow Feather Jealousy |
Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
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The crow, flinging scraps of voiceless sound at me, flies away heavy. Am I so jealous, throwing a rock to chase him, glad a loose quill falls? He has a thousand feathers; I must fly with only one. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
One of those oddities that happens -- I wrote this last night, and when I opened PIP to post it this morning, there was a poem by Martie /pip/Forum80/HTML/003612.html with the same image, that she also wrote last night. Yo Martie, time for a duet, methinks! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
The crow, flinging scraps of voiceless sound at me, flies away heavy. Am I so jealous, Believe me, I am more jealous of how you present these images for us. you may have only one, but you use it wisely, and very, very well. love gem xxxxxxx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
psssst... poet sir ...I'll let you in on a secret... ( you fly with your pen, your words are your wings) and YES... its ALWAYS time for you & Martie to duet. "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
I really like this poem, it's definately my style: freeverse and layered. keep up the depth. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'll second that you two duet, for I was sure that yours must have been in response...so if you two are going to think along the same lines, you may as well ink some too, for the benefit of the rest of us! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
We may know tomorrow -- today Martie's a busy lady....having a baby, I believe, something like that.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes one is quite enough... when a heart as big as yours gives it power. *S* Beautiful work... whether read as a "duet" or not. *S* |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I know a woman who types with her toes, I guess she is able to hold a quill also... I am so lucky to have these arms and hands to do the same. now if the crow could write a poem for all those feathers that would be a tale. lucky dale Speaking of ghosts, and after such an eternity. . .wouldn't you know, here comes mine again... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hi Suthern, Hi, Lucky..... I knew a fellow who typed his with a pencil -- in his mouth....wrote things that were happy and thoughtful at the same time, like you two in your lighter moments....but he sure didn't format 'em the Lucky way! I wrote this mainly as practice on the Choka form -- not easy for me, but I love it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yep...I think you fly with more feathers then you know, I've seen your wings. And pssst...I'd love another duet! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I loved this. short but full of impact, nicely written indeed! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yeowzah! Duet tuet! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
funny...i just read a horoscope that said i should release the songbird within by next month and ditch the shrilling crow....they say it comes in threes so what does it mean oh what does it mean? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
It means your newspaper got wet and the ink ran...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
no it means i should stop reading horrorscopes grins |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed - ahhh yes . . . I love this you know? I often fly with no wings myself . . . xxoo |
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