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I am (re written for the today challenge)
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I am (re written for the today challenge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I'm everything accused of me-- I am potential of "think not" I hear the voices mocking me I see myself a celtic knot. I want a simple moment's peace-- I'm everything accused of me. I fantasize that I am free. I feel the bellied Bacchus laugh. I touch the inner depths dis-ease-- I fear I am beyond my grasp. I weep despair's eternity. I fantasize that I am free. I understand there is a need and recognize the sanctity I visualize an end to chains and try to understand the pain in hopes I can grow half a wing-- I understand there is a need. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I was wonderin' how you were gonna get away with issuing a challenge, then posting a re-post...LOL Glad ya brought yerself up-to-date witch. ~yeti |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
all that and so much more..  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
And STILL...you are beautiful... Love you, lady...  "My friends are my estate." |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Wow!!This one was as good as the last one. I enjoy reading you. angelblueyes |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
First, when I refreshed I saw that both you and Icy had posted and I got so excited I nearly peed myself... Second, the last stanza...oh my...Outstanding! Last, funny you mention "wing" I have been having dreams lately that revolve around me having wings of some sort... Love it, love you! |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
it occurs to me we could all post this poem of ourselves everyday and it would be and still us hug you love |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, I liked this one, too. I think this challenge looks like fun. I just might tey it, too.  Hugs to you, Lady Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I see myself a Celtic knot"---I can see that! LOL  Enjoyed the peek into the you of you! Warm hugs, EA |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K - for some odd reason I heard you softly singing this . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-25-2003 06:50 PM).] |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
What can I say? Excellent poem! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I accuse you of being a poet.  A BRILLIANT poet.  Guilty as charged... so keep it up. "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I fear I am beyond my grasp." Yes child, this is true. |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
I weep despair's eternity. This is my favorite line, but they are all so good. So good. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Although I reposted mine, I think I'm going to have to retry the try because things, and people, change, don'tchaknow? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The poem would be great simply as a glance into the woman... but that last verse is superb, whatever the challenge. *S* Excellent work... I'm glad you are. *S* |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Serenity sister poet: You ARE...the mystical white smoke, and freedom to behold. Bowing humbly. TD |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I fear I am beyond my grasp. I know that feeling Karen... and you will be free...and grow that half wing, if not the whole. Thank you for bringing this challenge back. It has given me something to look forward to this evening...so many to read and enjoy. M |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Oh that I should be as free as thee... This is great, Karen - I enjoyed every line... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all for reading and especially for stepping up to the challenge once again. And icebox? Your reply reminded me of an eerie Saturday night live skit with Jane Curtain and Gilda Radner. Gilda is complaining that she has been feeling a bit off-kilter these days. And Jane asks her to try to pinpoint this vague feeling of uneasiness. Jane: "Do you think it could be your UVULA?" Gilda shrugs: "I don't know Jane, I just can't seem to put my finger on it." Still amusing, but another eerie moment from the original Not-Ready-For-Primetime-Players. and smile with me folks, I'm just happy to be here with you all for awhile tonight. |
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