Open Poetry #27 |
From This Day Forward (Tima's Challenge) |
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Hamster in a metal cage 'round and 'round I race outpaced trying to get off this county fair merry-go-round lift me up and set me down softly please? I paid my fair for this sacred space From this day forward I will walk twice behind It's ok, really I like to rewind or is that unwind? Either way I cant escape your face the memories invade even if I push and pull them away Tough to dispel myself that woman I once knew well See Tima's challenge: /pip/Forum29/HTML/001459.html |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!! Your writing is just so absolutely phenominal, Sue... You need to let the rest of the world in on PIP's little secret, and publish as many of these as you can. We see the light of those |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"I paid my fair for this sacred space" Was this an accident? Fair, instead of fare. Because it adds a very interesting layer to the entire write. And? You want help doing.....what? lol It's a beauty, Susie Ed |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brad - thank you so much! And PIPS little secret is PIP . . . all of you so sweet you are Ed - nope not an accident hmmm wonder where I learned that trick? Thank you and yes I need help Thanks guys xxoo |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Some metal cages you just can't seem to get out of! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow, Sue...you did a great job on this. You took that simple phrase and just ran with it, and I love what you came up with. Wonderfully done, my friend. Hugs ~Vicky "My friends are my estate." |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
WOW! Sue, that was wonderful...I feel much the same way often...but we gonna be ok! Thank you so much for participating, I am working on mine now...and will post it here as soon as I am finished! Great write my friend! Tima |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
yes.... mmm you write a sigh so well |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
It's ok, really I like to rewind or is that unwind? i await this day....... the woman i once knew well........i still wear this woman's face while i wait for the one i left a long time ago...all so convuluted some days, i know so thought provoking, you confuse me suzieQ, and you make me think, tho i probably put my own spin your poignant words |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sue, You leave me shaking my head with your insightful words... As for that hamster thing...I always wondered...do they think they are going somewhere??? Susan C. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
El - you got that right - thank you Thanks Vicky . . . Hey Tima, can you put that in writing please? Thank you Bri - yes . . . a sigh indeed thank you for seeing it for what it is No Michele, you are always right on thank you Susan LOL - they do they really do - is why I used it - thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
lift me up and set me down softly please? *puts you down softly next to a nice pint of beer* oh sue, you know I relate to this. this is too expressive and gut wrenching a write to be on the second page already... stay strong susie, and i'll keep trying to if you do. much love, gem xxx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks Gem, needed that A LOT xxoo |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very powerful words...spoken from heart and soul. Thanks, Eric |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yep, even if you vault off the ride, you're still dizzy for a while afterward....hook your fingers through the fence and hang on until it passes....then go have cotton candy and three hot dogs with sauce and a root beer, to celebrate your newly settled innards..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Excellent write, enjoyed. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I paid my fair for this sacred space Yes, Sue, sometimes we want to just stay in that space for awhile....that we have paid our "fair" for. I understand. Hugs Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-28-2003 09:41 AM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well now Sue, you know I am keeping this! Excellent. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
insightful reminder that memory can be both friend and foe. beautiful tone. Rf |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Either way I cant escape your face the memories invade even if I push and pull them away Tough to dispel myself I love the ride this took me on. *S* So much whirling around a core of introspection... Excellent! *S* |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Eric, always from the heart and soul indeed Ed, ahahahah Ok that really made me smile HUGE - I needed that along with Gem;s frosty one above thank you Thank you Sy, always good to see you reading me Thank you for understanding Ethel Thank you Chris, I promise no more ugly words for you LOL Robert, God yes you said it for sure cant live with them - cant live without them thank you Thanks suthern - I didnt even really see that aspect Thanks guys xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome writing! you know i love reading you! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks Dix - me too - I mean you LOL havent had as much time as I would like to lately thank you xxoo |
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