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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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crack of shell spills you through we are dead only on the outside a wing extends even the forsaken fly |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you're good at these short ones Raph, very powerful writing [This message has been edited by passing shadows (07-24-2003 02:11 PM).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Raphael Within the dark of this, hope. I like that, and this! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Yes . . . very true sometimes I dont even believe xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-24-2003 07:11 PM).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I swear Raph that you can write any poem any length, any style and it is always perfection. This definately deserves a damn!...a powerful message. AND it's about damn time that you posted that new pic  Your manager has spoken!  Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! [This message has been edited by Honeybee (07-24-2003 08:45 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"even the forsaken fly"  YES. and even the weariest manage to head south, tho usually on the tailfeathers of borrowed velocity. They say there's a reason for everything. I think I have just been inventing them, m'self. Damn it's dark in here. (tapping on my skull) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Dix Thanks Martie its buried deep inside Sue you know me, on any given day who knows what i believe in M yes my manager had spoken it's getting her to be quiet that's the trick K know anybody with tailfeathers i can latch on to? grins thanks |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
"we are dead only on the outside" Dark, yet hopeful. Short, yet, oh so powerful! Excellent poem!  Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Short, but oh so pwerful.You can write anything with ease.Very well done. angelblueyes |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"even the forsaken fly" Yes indeed! Yes indeed! |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Triumph amidst tragedy. Left me feeling very strong!! SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- crack of shell spills you through glimmers here and there, do it ,i know too. raffi put the rest of you on, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Loved the entire thing....sometimes we need to borrow the velocity of others and sometimes we can do it on our own...lets just hope they are nice tailfeathers.... Susan C. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*limps with a broken wing* perhaps maybe I should sign up for the high mile club?? lol did that make sense OBVIOUSLY not...I'm trying to be all witty and stuff..blah back to reality...thought your muse was gone and ohh yeah nice pic I still dont have the nerve to put mine up there..hahaha..ciao *hugs*If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahuh!.. here is my handsome friend, just as I said.  even the forsaken fly Oh indeed, indeed! Great work here Sir Raph. Maree fate is not just |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
tis true, tis true . . . |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ok..why do I read these without responding? hehe..I'm just going to be nice to you from now on..and keep my brattiness inside. Brattiness aside- wow..what a great poem. i really mean it, you amamze me |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The boxer shows his jab...and connects! Well done, Raph. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
...so long as one is not dead on the inside... Surreal imagery with ponderance, Raph. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, you really do throw these punches right on out there...with just a few words. Great work, Sir Raphael......great picture, too... you just aren't showing us enough of you.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Ladybug Angeleyes very kind of you to say thanks thanks ice Shara a great compliment, happy it had that effect mish i try grins thanks Susan hope so thanks Kris Ah the lovely Lady Maree..my day is complete grins Thanks Sue one day i h$pe Thanks Liz don't be too nice, brattiness is a good thing grins Thanks Ed Round 27 Thanks mark yes it still breathes somewhere deep Ethel thanks yer too sweet, funny i think i'm showing too much |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I see me coffinside rotting begun new life emerging... ~*~ Well done, Raph |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks vandana grins Thanks Chris Karilea thanks as always |
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