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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Dedicated to the drama of living happily ever after acknowledging the flaws with a passion and promise brought upon by a character role created by the nature of you. Drawing me in with every chapter holding me captive pouring through the happiness giving birth to my smile enlightening my vision, born in you. You gave me something to believe in without make believing something to feel passing through my fingertips where love lasted a little longer watered down with tears. A slow story unfolding, sadly another turn of the page as I burrowed deeper into the fantasy of something more or less marking me intensely that had no meaning after all. Realizing, as I reached the ending each chapter started to wane leafing through the wander lust that took me back to the beginning completing the closure highlighting the thrill of it all. Regretfully, I lay you down to rest on the highest shelf behind a trap door on a wall that I've built leading faraway from my heart so I can keep you close without crying a river all over again. ~*~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sharp and clear. The final verse was brilliant... TD |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Regretfully, I lay you down to rest on the highest shelf behind a trap door on a wall that I've built leading faraway from my heart so I can keep you close without crying a river all over again. Lori, so sad, but so beautiful.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...Your honesty captures what happens to so many, without the admit of it..so sad the circle that sometimes spins in and out and gone. Very impressed here! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Take a bow, kiss the mirror, and pat yourself on the back for me!   EA |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"You gave me something to believe in without make believing something to feel passing through my fingertips where love lasted a little longer watered down with tears." Ya had to take me back there huh??  Well, guess it's better than bleeding alone. Intense Blues...quite. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Writing poetry helps keep it all in perspective, to a point. ~just talking to myself, it's my coping mechanism~  in case you ever wondered. uh huh. I've never told you all enough, how happy I am to be keeping company with you...Kathleen, Ethel, Martie, Linda, and you too blondie...thank you. Now I shall go kiss the mirror! Hugs you guys and dolls. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-22-2003 12:42 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy? I too have many well read books behind these walls . . . This is brilliant tweets xxoo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And this blondie says if the walls works for you keep building it higher - now Sigmund Frued might argue with me but what did he ever know of love anyway  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Most of those books are tired stories, but they're still worth saving, just in case. Thank you for chirping in tweets. It's debatable for sure.... and there's no telling when it will come tumbling down. Until then, I just keep on building, after all, it's my job. Thanks Mysteria. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I'm not here often enough to tell you how much I enjoy your poetry. I can relate particularly to this one. No wall can be built to withstand the storm of truth but the storm passes overhead when bending ones head to the ground ... and don't we all have to look where we are going? |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Regretfully, I lay you down to rest on the highest shelf behind a trap door on a wall that I've built leading faraway from my heart so I can keep you close without crying a river all over again. this is so so good,girlygirl but maybe just throw him in the river instead |
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