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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2003-07-21 03:10 AM

my daughter caught fireflies
   for me to see
and kept them
for hours
       in a cage
till I came home

and when I came home
        she showed me

they were not as bright as her eyes

   but being a good girl
she went to release them
after I had seen

          she opened the door
and waited
   but they
didn't go
          so

she dumped them out
shook them loose from bondage
in the frontyard

and it pleased her

so now
many hours later

I see them

their lights burning like drowning wicks

in the same places they fell

and I think:

do I tell her not to do that again?
        to save their precious lives?

or do I
tell her

  she showed me
         the constellation
                 Innocence
there
   in
      the grass

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-07-21 03:17 AM

This heart that you reveal is the heart I fell in love with...

you ARE spark and buzz and dash, and lovely grateful freedom falling on the grass, free to fly away.

This is YOU...and beautiful, bri...

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2003-07-21 03:18 AM

Brian, my friend...this is precious.

I can just picture her showing them to you,
and her eyes glowing with pride in her catch.
Nothing more beautiful than the innocence of
a child..and you've written it perfectly.
"it is better to be a part of beauty for one instant and then cease
to exist than to exist forever and never be a part of beauty"
-- Don Marquis

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-07-21 05:01 AM

.....wow, I could see my little girl doing something like that

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-07-21 06:49 AM

I believe

she showed you
the constellation
innocence

in her eyes.

You had us there,
watching...

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

5 posted 2003-07-21 08:01 AM

How touching...
I like this:
she showed me
the constellation
Innocence

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2003-07-21 08:18 AM

brian,
Well done a lovely write.

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

7 posted 2003-07-21 12:52 PM

thank you everyone

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2003-07-21 01:03 PM

brian

Of love and tenderness you write, and I am completely captivated.

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

9 posted 2003-07-22 10:54 AM

oh what a scene you painted.

beyooootiful. xx

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

10 posted 2003-07-22 11:11 PM

Ohhhh I love this write and I can so relate to it for I have been teaching my two year old grandson the joy of catching ligtning bugs this summer. But we let them go into one of my flower beds soon after capturng them so they can safey fly away back into the night.

Truly enjoyed this one.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

11 posted 2003-07-23 07:14 AM

and please let the fish go too.........
for all those with their fishing poles, set them free
nice tribute to something that comes on a summer night

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

12 posted 2003-07-23 04:53 PM

or do I
tell her

  she showed me
         the constellation
                 Innocence
===================================

me thinks the bugs would have willingly went there just to inspire the moment described ....and this very cool poem..
a tender render poet sir...
very very nice.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

13 posted 2003-07-23 10:26 PM

Ehh, what can I say to this?

Just what the others here have already told ya.

Awesome dude!

Ed..

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

14 posted 2003-07-23 11:08 PM

This is beautiful.The innocence, the sparkle, the tenderness shared.
angelblueyes

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

15 posted 2003-07-24 02:00 AM

thank you people

and?
she found them the next day..in the sunlight
all around the firefly cage she had put down

still there

sigh
she squatted
then stood up
with a stunned expression

growing up sucks........

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