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shadow of gray cloud |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Lone hawk soars in troubled sky. Ciccada think it dusk--they cry beneath the shadow of gray cloud. With urgency, the Mother's need, ending of expectancy-- birth this storm, its thunder cries. I weep. (I keen within the sound) muted by the roll of drum, bite the cord of life--undone-- bound by knot to spare my blood rest this wrinkled life on breast... I pray I have the sustenance. Cold in shadow of gray cloud, oil lamp fed by the fat, Dante's shadows mock the walls I count my seeds and hone the blade-- the warrior shall hunt again-- pondering my weaponry wondering how to slay a cloud... * * * (Repost, reworked from Open Poetry #7) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh trust me...you have the sustenance baby...that and so much more.  No matter what the differences |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
goodness girl...this touches something I know, such an edge you carry...slaying a cloud should be easy...it just takes a little rain. It's making rain that isn't easy, at least not here. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If anyone could slay a cloud, you could! Your mind is sharper than any sword!  Another great write! Warm hugs, EA |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
k, Hawk knows what damage can become under grey cloud when storm is done It is on the edge she hunts and keen eyes the ground there victims found Kraw' |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I count my seeds and hone the blade-- the warrior shall hunt again--" ...and too, the Huntress make war... I guess one should always be aware of what you might be holding in your hands. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Man should always be wary of a woman who is on a mission and carrying a knife.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Whew those with the name cloud beware. Strong intense language in this Celeste! Great images all the way through. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome K |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I'm wowed by this! An excellent piece of writing, the way you weave the strands of imagery into a single whole. And a great poem to read at 04:30 local..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This, my friend, is almost as special as YOU ... regards sudhir p.s. I would love to know how to slay a few clouds as well... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ya know... take a slice of cloud a few stars a dash of breeze.. and some mushrooms and you have a divine omelet... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"wondering how to slay a cloud..." too cool... I wish I thought of that |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
you cant slay a cloud you can know that there is light behind it this is a painting you write galleries full pain and beauty mmm |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I keep finding these little buried treasures, that I somehow let slip past me the first time around... "I weep. (I keen within the sound) muted by the roll of drum, bite the cord of life--undone-- bound by knot to spare my blood rest this wrinkled life on breast... I pray I have the sustenance." Karen...gawd, lady...this is an amazing write. It reached in and grabbed something inside of me. Yes...echoing JM...yes...you DO have the sustenance..  Love you, lady.  "My friends are my estate." |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow....  ... Even though you're gone ... |
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