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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-15 08:24 PM


I breathe you in,
secretly.
Alluring blaze
deep in my veins.

Close up,
shoot through them
like a roller-coaster.
Be through my
body, and drink
of my sins.

Let's rewind,
you'll start
to feel dizzy
when we come to a complete stop
and begin again.

Touch my hand
for I am the wind, cooling
beads of sweat upon your
sleeping
forehead.

Understand my anger,
you played upon my pain like
violin.

Stop.
Rewind, begin again.
Thoughts melding as I
breathe you in.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
QjQ
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1 posted 2003-07-15 08:30 PM


terrific read  n  write....

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ


JaiOfHeaven
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2 posted 2003-07-16 01:53 AM


That was on a harlequin temptress level. Kinda made my heart sing for a moment. I appreciate the time you put in to write it. The feeling escaping me is sweet indeed. Beautiful...
passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-07-16 02:09 AM


I like your style!
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2003-07-16 12:23 PM


I appreciated the part about the wind cooling sweat from the forehead...James
gemjop
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5 posted 2003-07-21 08:16 PM



walker
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6 posted 2003-07-21 08:36 PM


Love this one.
scorpio
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right...there
7 posted 2003-07-21 08:40 PM


An absorbing poem...well done..

believe in what your heart feels...

Miah
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8 posted 2003-07-21 09:43 PM


I love how it flowed.  A wonderful delight to read.
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2003-07-21 09:48 PM


Beautiful.

(There's a delicious man who says that to me, so yes, that caught my attention.)

spingiddy serenity here.

Lovely, just lovely you.

Aenimal
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10 posted 2003-07-21 10:12 PM


l*ved this. great abstract style leaves this open to interpretation, i won't venture mine
vlraynes
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11 posted 2003-07-21 10:23 PM



Simply beautiful, Kaoru...love this.


*smiling at spingiddy serenity*

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2003-07-22 12:08 PM


Highly provocative and sensual...

Warm hugs,
EA

littlewing
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13 posted 2003-07-22 02:34 AM


Meghan:

this is amazing writing . . .

Understand my anger,
you played upon my pain like
violin.

xxoo

Goldenrose
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14 posted 2003-07-22 06:39 AM


Very good writing...thank you

Goldenrose.

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