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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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"I Want" I want to taste a raindrop I want to know the pressure of your hand won't stop I want to know the smell of a red rose with my eyes closed I want to know you are there even when I didn't ask to know your love won't pass I want to feel the warmth of the sun without the heat I want your heart to keep I want to share my humor my tears and my soul I want you to be the half that makes me whole |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Susan, Only if you rub the right lamp. LOL enjoyed |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I want you to be the half that makes me whole Susan, I especially like this line. A good thought about the one who is your special love!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Ask and you shall receive.Good read. paladin |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
As a poem I thought it was nice and romantic, though at points I noticed some of the half ryhmes didn't quite work. But on the whole I liked it. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Peter, Sometimes I rhyme, sometimes I don't. But it always gets written the way it comes out. I will be the first to admit I write because it feels good, not because I am a poet. Thank you for reading and commenting. Susan C. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Susan... hope your wish list is fulfilled! *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May all your wants become your reality!  Warm hugs, EA |
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