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Cheap Champagne |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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I've poured through the emptiness looking to recycle the best part of me something of significance while you passed out rain checks for my hard earned love. Complete with rebates that filled your empty heart that you couldn't afford to reimburse and it pains me to sit beside the curb while you keep adding to my baggage. Discarded in the wrong bin without a promise that I ever mattered I would rather be thrown into a cart and shop lifted out the door. Instead, I have paid the price for everything I thought to offer like a bottle of cheap champagne that makes my head ache and my heart break. I feel like a plastic cover a make shift for my own bed staking a claim beneath the bridge a resting place to call my own and sleep you off. ~*~ |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
fabulous... enjoyed reading... A voice of honesty |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I've poured through the emptiness looking to recycle the best part of me something of significance while you passed out rain checks for my hard earned love." Ohhh...such hard feelings to bear, such a good write to share! Sleep and feel better soon. Thank you for sharing this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, there is a lot of aching going on in this write, bluesygal. Sounds like two bottles might be required. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
excellent idea Bluesy . . . Goddd I know this one well Dont you ever let anyone treat you so . . . please (where are they, I'll get 'em) lol *smile* tweets xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks you guys for easing my pain, you are truly an alternative medicine that works every time. Oh gawd it's almost Monday!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh I felt that one! Yesterday while shopping I bought an urn that has on the front "Ashes of Ex-Husband(s)" and I told the lady had she of put that on the counter where it could be seen better, she would make a "killing!" LOL, oh you know me - humor in everything even loss and pain, turn it around and learn from it, and take it with you to the next to not repeat the cycle right? Nicely done. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Instead, I have paid the price for everything I thought to offer like a bottle of cheap champagne that makes my head ache and my heart break. I feel like a plastic cover a make shift for my own bed staking a claim beneath the bridge a resting place to call my own and sleep you off. Lori, gawddd do i know this? you say it so painfully, and so so well. always a pleasure to read your words, however painful they are. we love ya gal  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and it pains me to sit beside the curb while you keep adding to my baggage. ============================= damn .......................... *big mothy sigh* *big mothy hug*   Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
and it pains me to sit beside the curb while you keep adding to my baggage. great lines, and i can understand the sentiment too unfortunately |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Quite well done Blue one... These lines were all thoughtful and pointed. Quite clear in your own unique style. Hugs for the sentiment, applause for the write. TD |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hope good things happen for you...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and it pains me to sit beside the curb while you keep adding to my baggage. Discarded in the wrong bin without a promise that I ever mattered I know that curb and bin well... and it's tough to remember that anyone who can't offer that promise shouldn't matter. *S* Painful write, Blues... but an excellent one! |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
You said it Lady ... hear hear ... that's telling him ... excellent vent. Enjoyed. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I've poured through the emptiness looking to recycle the best part of me something of significance while you passed out rain checks for my hard earned love. Complete with rebates that filled your empty heart that you couldn't afford to reimburse and it pains me to sit beside the curb while you keep adding to my baggage. Lori, this hurt me to read it. I'm so sorry that someon made you feel this way.  Heart hugs, my friend  Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
What a great title!--"Cheap Champagne" Love the double entendre! Poem packs a poignant punch! Warm hugs, EA P.S. I just read the reply that I made to your reply to my poem "strawberry kisses". I mistakenly left out a couple of words and those omissions totally put my reply out of context!!!!!!! I had meant that we could share STORIES OF our summer love!!! Wow! What a difference a couple of words make! LOL  Warm hugs, EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (07-08-2003 01:50 PM).] |
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IntoTheFlames Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 92Va, USA |
Excellent Write!!  ~*Summer*~ |
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