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Knowing the words |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Theres a crack in the curtain where moonlight invades the pitch of my black thoughts. I could be the hand, that pulls the curtain tight. Just like i squeeze myself into your thoughts by force and hope we can work it out. With many hours spent with words I am nightmare material you see me soft, i see me soil. Much the same? with your world of make believe knowledge much greater than mine? You know every word but selfless which is the earth essence of my peace. [This message has been edited by gemjop (06-11-2003 12:34 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
gemjop Strong symbols, good write. |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
i love the imagery in this |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
I like, particularly the first stanza. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very interesting write - enjoyed this very much!! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Theres a crack in the curtain where moonlight invades the pitch of my black thoughts. I could be the hand, that pulls the curtain tight. Or, our sweet little Gemma, you could be the hand that opens the curtain up....to let out all your troubles, hurt, joy, and happiness!! It's good to see you this morning, little Lady.  Hugs   Ethel Mae |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gemma~ What a creative write~ I so enjoyed the read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your poetic mind is brilliant! Have a great day! EA |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
love the poem especially these words: "Just like i squeeze myself into your thoughts by force and hope we can work it out." *s M |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thankyou for all your wonderful replies, you all make my day. been having bad nights sleep Ethel, i'm sure you know what its like. the darkness lets you think too much, when i should be opening the curtain, i know, you're always right. much love to ya all m'friends. gemma xxxx |
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pisumnux Junior Member
since 2003-06-11
Posts 49Troy, NY |
I loved the imagery too. Seeing you use it inspires me to try to use it better. |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very good write,i could actually picture things in my mind. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
The shade of moonlight suits you .... ... the best of both light and dark. Thoughts do take on a whole new light. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Quite contrary gemma~ A nice read from beginning to end. Always good to read you gal. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"You know every word but selfless." James |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
gemjop - you write of feelings well... BC |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
more beautiful replies from u all!  thankyou! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
you see me soft, i see me soil love that |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
earth essence,sweet |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok Raph stole my line . . . that is just pure silk that line gem how do you do that? amazing xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
an awesome write here gemma |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
thanks you guys.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey lady! I've been reading you. I love your style of short fragmented images strung together to make a softly worded statement of power. Um, what do I mean? Like this: "I am nightmare material you see me soft, i see me soil." In just those two sentences you convey much, and btw, I like to use lowercase "I" to portray a darker, or "lesser" sense of myself as well. Very nice. I'll be hanging around awhile, if ya don't mind.  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
awww, seren, thanks, your words mean much to me. xxx |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks for leaving the curtains cracked, so that we might enjoy this little look within. Well done. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Wow. This is really well done, Gem. I like the ebb and flow of the incriminations. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I missed this what a gem you have here  I love the way you express yourself I wish I could..just scared lolIf at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
ouu! nice Write ARCTIC WIND |
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