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David Carrson
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since 2003-06-23
Posts 25
Carrickfergus N. Ireland

0 posted 2003-06-23 07:53 PM


No Limit

He came around the corner at a moderate rate of knots
causing hurt to others was never in his thoughts.
His wife beside him laughing, his kids safe in the rear,
hardly touching forty though the road ahead was clear.
His life till then was happy, sure he'd made the odd mistake,
But the child that ran in front of him left him little time to brake
The squealing tyres, the cold dull thud, then the quiet that hurt his ears,
the seconds passed to others but to him they seemed like years.
His wife she stared out blankly at the limp form on the ground,
he couldn't move nor couldn't speak as the small crowd gathered round.
The ambulance came with lightning speed, but left with no great haste,
and whilst talking to the Policeman his last drink he still could taste.
That lovely meal with ones he loved, a Birthday party treat,
a little wine to wash it down, but still steady on his feet.

The funeral past, he sent some flowers, sincere in all his sorrow,
but the guilt he felt inside his heart would still be the tomorrow.
The court date came, "an accident", no blame was placed on him,
For when he'd gave his sample, the limit he was within.
But lying there awake each night the thought pounded in his head,
if he hadn't drank at all that night would that little girl be dead?

He'll never know for time wont give a second chance to mend,
the things he'd done to bring her life so swiftly to an end.

[This message has been edited by David Carrson (06-23-2003 07:58 PM).]

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Startime55
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since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada
1 posted 2003-06-23 07:56 PM


Oh My Gosh...how traggic for both....My heart hurt to read this as I felt pain for the parents and the man...

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2003-06-23 08:22 PM


Dang.
Tragedies such as that should NEVER happen.
You've penned a real life nightmare for ev ery parent, and everyone whose ever had a drink and then crawled behind the wheel, assuming they are allright to drive. Legal limits mean nothing to the dead.

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
3 posted 2003-06-23 08:33 PM


Hello David

Welcome to Passions and thank you for sharing your heartfelt words.  You painted such a vivid and very real picture.  It's so nice to see someone from the beautiful Emerald Isle joining us.  I'll look forward to reading more of your words.

Take care.........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2003-06-23 08:46 PM


I scarcely took a breath as I read your words. How dreadfully tragic for everyone involved. A friend of mine (a policeman, while off-duty) struck and killed a child who had swerved into the road on his bicycle. The emotional pain and guilt (altho' ruled an accident) was overwhelming for him.

Your vividly descriptive writing made the tragedy come alive for the reader--painfully so, and that is the mark of a good writer.

Welcome aboard!

Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-06-24 05:14 AM


what an eye opener!
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
6 posted 2008-08-12 10:58 PM


tragedy! is a horrible thing to go through...


ARCTIC WIND

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