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The Still Here Dad
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The Still Here Dad |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Still Here Dad All torn up the grass is bent and heavy with the sweet smell sent by something love that passes time like crickets singing on a line that moves across dimension’s map the door gets opened just like that The old push lawnmower had a song sleeves rolled up to half past long and a hat lets not forget the squint those fine lines turning up by flint from touch of sun so many times lit that it wore you or you wore it The sparkler is still in the street put on your shoes you’ll burn your feet can here it echo past the end where the garden hose and sunburn blend ‘til nine o’clock and a sound like thunder when horizons fill with the same old wonder [This message has been edited by Martie (07-04-2003 07:08 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marti - just lovely as you do... BC |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, Martie love the images here..beautifully penned m'dear...absolutely wonderful. Happy 4th July! Maree  fate is not just |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
such a beautiful write, filled with many creative images...where love burns in the heart forever...thank you for sharing. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The perfect nostalgic touch to mark this day! Here's to Happy 4th of July memories and to making some new ones! Warm hugs, EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A Fourth filled with happy memories Martie! May yours be a happy and safe one my American friend. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ 'The old push lawnmower had a song sleeves rolled up to half past long and a hat lets not forget the squint those fine lines turning up by flint from touch of sun so many times lit that it wore you or you wore it' Awwwwww, this is just the sweetest thing I've read this day. Lifts my spirits, it does~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Now I know how....all you do is create a scene that's so vivid a person could walk right into it....and then take us there ....simple....anybody could do it, right? ....or maybe not....maybe you're just one of a kind....either way, it's glorious! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The old push lawnmower had a song sleeves rolled up to half past long and a hat lets not forget the squint those fine lines turning up by flint from touch of sun so many times lit that it wore you or you wore it I suspected from the title that I was going to love this one... I was right. *S* This is beautiful! *S* |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
At half past remember you light the sky with your poetic fireworks. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
old thoughts with edges smoothed by gentle hands.  |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
rolling smooth and fine nice |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
embracing write |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Martie...thank you. I saw this last night, but my mind was elsewhere, so I saved this to come back this morning, and say thank you...for so many things! Hugs, little one... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Martie rhymed and its DIVINE... and could your personification be any cooler??? The old push lawnmower had a song sleeves rolled up to half past long Your writing Rockwell verses me dear... scrap booked memories in rhyme  Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh Marti, There are some wonderful images that never tarnish, or pale or dampen in the summer rain. This was exceptional. TD |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - this is just so great!!! I so enjoy seeing through your words - Paul |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, no matter what you write about, you have me right there as I'm reading your wonderful words. You are sooooo gooood, my friend!!! Thanks for sharing your thoughts and heart with us. Hugs  Ethel |
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Jennis#1 Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 112IL, Usa |
Great poem. I enjoyed reading it. I hope that you will visit my posts. keep on writting more poems. |
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anwaarhassan Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 181Menifee, CA |
Hi Martie, I liked this poem very much...very descriptive imagery...great write. Anwaar |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
yep, yet another good'n. enjoyed muchly. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wonderful story, Martie. Sandra |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
However did I miss this gem? Wonderful writing Martie. hugs, Chris 'The years have seen my life |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
All of us have images of fathers and you've painted a fine one. Those of us who now play those roles have big shoes to fill. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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