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the myth of why I'm fine
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the myth of why I'm fine |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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within my reoffense my own defense it is it is the myth of why I'm fine it grows ever more efferent in me Now it washes me Now I am ions and ohms Now I am negative resistance Now my own foe Now forfeit my whims Now for my sworn sin sworn sin sworn Now I am rife with the finery of non inference the omni infinite Now washed in irony yin and yen wash my feet in the fire of Eden wash me in the ferment of freedom wash me in the fire I harnessed god with a devil I harnessed god with a devil he did not make we killed the giants with a sling we killed them giants and I gave my son too son too son to the girl in the show with the glint she wore she wore the hint was my guilt my strings my ring my shish wash my feet in the fire of Eden sting me with the volts vow to me the vigil walk with me walk with me my last walk it is the myth of why I'm fine the hymn of ions and ohms oms om siddhartha said it too om nirvana [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (06-29-2003 09:03 AM).] |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
 Bravo! Beautiful. I Loved it. So well writen, hard to explain really. ^_^Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Geez Rebel this was great, I have to admit though....(blushes), I always have to read your stuff twice...maybe I am a little shallow, and you are TOO DEEP FOR ME....haha  Anyway, I had to read this one twice and I loved it, may hafta go read again..... Tima C  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I'll place this in the library, to read again and again and someday, come to om in understanding.... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
throw me in the shallow water before i get too deep, sent me to the dictionary a bit but it made me think..do you smell the wood burning?  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm keeping this one. It's intense, Reb. I can't tell if the undercurrent is anger or survival instinct. (My Dad once told me it was the same energy--smile--and I should stop wasting mine on the trivial and save it for times of necessity--wink) I read it aloud, and my kids liked it too, btw. (Zach thinks you should write music!   )"wash my feet in the fire of Eden" nice. I'll have to watch my son--that just might show up in one his RPG'S he likes to make... This SHOULD be performed tho. He's absolutely right on that. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay.  NOW I'm keeping it. (why am I so damned goofy?) |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
This is amazing.I loved it more each time I read it.A powerful poem. Jason |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Connel -- thank you very much -- it isn't supposed to be easy to understand -- it borrows from the ideas of Zen Koans Tima -- thank you very much -- as long as you enjoyed it that's all that maters.. Sunshiny -- you honor me -- I am not worthy -- thank you goddess -- I love the smell of mesquite! -- glad it tickled your brain cellsblaze starr -- thankyou ma'am... very perceptive of you to read it aloud -- it should be -- and tell Zach I do write music! (thought you knew that) be sure to tell him though that I hunt down and eat anybody who steals anything I've written  the appropriate music for this would be electronica, or house music, possibly even industrial...I may do it sometime, if I ever have the time Jason -- thank you for reading and your response sir.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
she wore the hint was my guilt my strings my ring my shish wash my feet in the fire of Eden sting me with the volts vow to me the vigil walk with me walk with me my last walk it is the myth of why I'm fine the hymn of ions and ohms Double Wow!! I didn't know that you write music. I could almost hear a chant while I was reading this. Probably completely opposite of what you were thinking, but it's what I could hear. Kind of like some of Enya's. Weird how people hear different things about the same words, isn't it?  Hugs  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm stealin' it!  Cum'n get me! [This message has been edited by passing shadows (06-29-2003 10:58 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Ohm , let me think...this myth is fine like rose red wine, and your words true return to you. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
understand this, sin convicts, and tears down...it has illusions perfected for each....I had my own, but they echo just as this one does...wonderful work |
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