Open Poetry #27 |
On the Ward |
Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I recall dust-cobwebs stretching across cracked and peeling sky; the sounds of gurneys rattling as we lit up on the sly; the blue flourescents glinting on keys on metal rings; and the smell of Lysol wafting as we whispered stupid things. I remember songs we warbled when the moon lived in your eyes, glowing softly in the gray mist as days went drifting by. Why must I lose your laughter to hypodermic-stings? How much I hate the clarity this medication brings. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Great imagery and exquisite vocab... To use words such as gurneys and warbled with seemingly such ease is a skill on its own and you, my friend are very skilful Most enjoyed... Regards, sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thank you Sudhir, I appreciate that. passing shadows, Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wow! now there's a trip I wouldn't mind taking again. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I love the way you use rhyme in this -- where it's needed and only where it's needed, and woven in so naturally that it's part of the imagery itself. Well done, well done. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Sometimes I'd just rather be insane so I can at least see all the colors and through irrational journies find my own sense of joy and wonder! (sigh) It hurts to be clarified, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
What a glorious display of words.... I loved it! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Great work, interesting handle.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Pilgrimage - my first impression on reading this writing is excellent. My compliments on your thoughts written to read... BC |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Keth, come with me and we'll trip the light fantastic! Thank you RatLeader! Noah, I've thought that way too-but who knows what joys we'd see if our eyes were wide open? timothysangel, don't you love words? I do. Kaoru, thank you so much. Bill, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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